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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heyo. Excelling story!
I've been looking high and low for a yaoi-kiba coupling. XD Finally! XD Well, I just wish that Kiba would be the uke though, I've been dying to read about a uke-Kiba.. Kyaaaaaaaaaa XP *nose bleeds*
Can't wait to find out more!! Update it soon ^_^
I've been looking high and low for a yaoi-kiba coupling. XD Finally! XD Well, I just wish that Kiba would be the uke though, I've been dying to read about a uke-Kiba.. Kyaaaaaaaaaa XP *nose bleeds*
Can't wait to find out more!! Update it soon ^_^
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well.... i dont see much of this paring around... and ive never considered them together, but the story is really well written, and im really enjoying it... please continue, it does beg for a second chapter, and i cant wait to read it!
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
^_^....i find this cute....
even though i find these two UKES...kekekeke.....
weird to have Kiba Seme....but eh...^_^....
is loving it...cant wait to see the next update^_^
even though i find these two UKES...kekekeke.....
weird to have Kiba Seme....but eh...^_^....
is loving it...cant wait to see the next update^_^
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes, I think that this definitely needs another chapter...or two...or three...etc. This was fantastic! I love Kiba and Shikamaru, and this was both totally hot, and really sweet. And I am a hopeless romantic, so I am going to root for them being together in the end...if you decide to write more...which you should...please. With a cherry on top.
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
First off, I have to say that I love the crack pairing. It's fun to see different pairings and Shika/Kiba is one I've probably only seen one of before!
Very funny story. You are able to fully capture Shika's laziness in a very humourous way. I love the Ino-bashing at the beginning. Though I don't dislike Ino (I like her about 100xs more than Sakura) but the way you characterised her is just hilariously annoying! I like the inclusion of Chouji. The Chow man (don't ask about the weird nicknames I create for people, I'm weird that way) is one of my favorite characters. He's so adorable and his and Shika's relationship through the show is something that is just made from puppies, babies and all other cute things. And I have to say Chouji as a bodyguard is comical and yet somehow very suiting. For some reason I kept thinking about that ugly red thing Chouji's father wears (the headdress) and so in my head I had Chouji the bodyguard with a nice tailored black pin-stripped suit on, dark sunglasses, and that red headdress. Overactive imagination I've got, it seems.
I love the details that you've fortified this story. You really are an amazing author. I felt the whole part on how Ino and Shika ended up together was really interesting and comical at times too. You really begin to feel Shika's torment of an unloving marriage. One angle that you took that I found interesting, was the mundane, repeatitive quality Shika's life had come to. This sets up your plotline very well and I think it works well, however, at the same time I have to remember that Shika's character quality towards laziness almost makes reaptitiveness something he become use to. However, I guess redundacy would get on anyone's nerve after a while.
The accusations of Ino was almost comical, about Shika sleeping around, especially with Shika's retort. I love how you went and added Sasuke in there as the homewrecking pool boy. Sasuke in a speedo...*drools*. Then I get the image of the pool boy from Legally Blonde and that scene in the courtroom. "And the name of your boyfriend is?" "Naruto" "No further questions." "No wait, Naruto is a friend, just a friend." "You Bitch!" ^_^ Now wasn't that fun?
If you can't tell by now, I'm reading and writing this review at once. I have another *huge* compliment to give you towards Chouji's character. I feel that you have really done him a lot of justice in this fic. You made him a very well written, 3D character and I love the depth you've written into his actions and speech. Chouji almost has more life in your take on him than he does in the actual anime! He's very insightful and clever here and I just adore this characterisation of him!
Happy Endings? Cute and very clever. I like! I'm glad you threw Temari in there too, even if only for a short glimpse. She's like my fave female character in the whole show! And um...damn...Kiba...how can the other guys stay in the same room with him and not die from nosebleed. Like seriously, droolness! I love the collar & leash bit too...fits the dog boy quite well!
Kiba's character is this real interesting mix of cocky sex god and insecure boy. I think it works very well and it fits will the whole "whore" issue. I really liked how you made him have more to him than just a "whore" or sex. It makes you wonder how he got into that situation since there are glimpses of emotions that don't fit with that dominant personality. The tenderness was just too cute at the end! The whole lemon scene was very well written too. Good smut with a plot, written very well with indepth characters, can't make a better story in my book!
I really did quite enjoy this story, everything about it was just brilliant. I hope you'll write more! I want to know what happens with Kiba and Shika...and what would happen if Ino found out! Cause if Ino found out, then the whole family would hear the bitching! Drama, drama! You've got to include more.
Again, brilliant job. I look forward to more of your work, either with this story or another!
~fae
Very funny story. You are able to fully capture Shika's laziness in a very humourous way. I love the Ino-bashing at the beginning. Though I don't dislike Ino (I like her about 100xs more than Sakura) but the way you characterised her is just hilariously annoying! I like the inclusion of Chouji. The Chow man (don't ask about the weird nicknames I create for people, I'm weird that way) is one of my favorite characters. He's so adorable and his and Shika's relationship through the show is something that is just made from puppies, babies and all other cute things. And I have to say Chouji as a bodyguard is comical and yet somehow very suiting. For some reason I kept thinking about that ugly red thing Chouji's father wears (the headdress) and so in my head I had Chouji the bodyguard with a nice tailored black pin-stripped suit on, dark sunglasses, and that red headdress. Overactive imagination I've got, it seems.
I love the details that you've fortified this story. You really are an amazing author. I felt the whole part on how Ino and Shika ended up together was really interesting and comical at times too. You really begin to feel Shika's torment of an unloving marriage. One angle that you took that I found interesting, was the mundane, repeatitive quality Shika's life had come to. This sets up your plotline very well and I think it works well, however, at the same time I have to remember that Shika's character quality towards laziness almost makes reaptitiveness something he become use to. However, I guess redundacy would get on anyone's nerve after a while.
The accusations of Ino was almost comical, about Shika sleeping around, especially with Shika's retort. I love how you went and added Sasuke in there as the homewrecking pool boy. Sasuke in a speedo...*drools*. Then I get the image of the pool boy from Legally Blonde and that scene in the courtroom. "And the name of your boyfriend is?" "Naruto" "No further questions." "No wait, Naruto is a friend, just a friend." "You Bitch!" ^_^ Now wasn't that fun?
If you can't tell by now, I'm reading and writing this review at once. I have another *huge* compliment to give you towards Chouji's character. I feel that you have really done him a lot of justice in this fic. You made him a very well written, 3D character and I love the depth you've written into his actions and speech. Chouji almost has more life in your take on him than he does in the actual anime! He's very insightful and clever here and I just adore this characterisation of him!
Happy Endings? Cute and very clever. I like! I'm glad you threw Temari in there too, even if only for a short glimpse. She's like my fave female character in the whole show! And um...damn...Kiba...how can the other guys stay in the same room with him and not die from nosebleed. Like seriously, droolness! I love the collar & leash bit too...fits the dog boy quite well!
Kiba's character is this real interesting mix of cocky sex god and insecure boy. I think it works very well and it fits will the whole "whore" issue. I really liked how you made him have more to him than just a "whore" or sex. It makes you wonder how he got into that situation since there are glimpses of emotions that don't fit with that dominant personality. The tenderness was just too cute at the end! The whole lemon scene was very well written too. Good smut with a plot, written very well with indepth characters, can't make a better story in my book!
I really did quite enjoy this story, everything about it was just brilliant. I hope you'll write more! I want to know what happens with Kiba and Shika...and what would happen if Ino found out! Cause if Ino found out, then the whole family would hear the bitching! Drama, drama! You've got to include more.
Again, brilliant job. I look forward to more of your work, either with this story or another!
~fae
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was so good! I'm so glad Ino is the bitch... but Sasuke? Pool Boy? UGH!!! "cries in despair!"
I hope you do write a second chapter! Poor Shikamaru needs to be saved from butch Ino! Plus Kiba as stated is H.O.T!!!
Make them happy!!!
I hope you do write a second chapter! Poor Shikamaru needs to be saved from butch Ino! Plus Kiba as stated is H.O.T!!!
Make them happy!!!
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this :) If you do decide to continue this, then know that I will definetly read it. If not, then good job on this one, and thanks for writing it. I don't think I've ever read a Kiba/Shika before. Keep up the good work.
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August 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You have to make another chapter! Oh I just love that chapter so much. I hope you update soon!