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January 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Love it!! love it!! love it!! please update very very soon!!!!
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This mission seems so unlikely. But I so love this pairing and that is too hot.
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January 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love the plot! (the sex aint bad, too!)
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November 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A good and interesting story! I really enjoy it but I think next chapter should be the end of the lemon sessions, I want Naruto to go back to the village and Kyubi to play matchmaker! And to see Iruka being wooed by Kakashi-sensei!
Thank you for the story.
Thank you for the story.
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November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I hope you continue this soon cause it is a GREAT story:D THANKS:D
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November 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
very lovely! the lemon scenes are to die for!
well i always like to have some somthing to add to these to help
improve the story. not just pointing out mistakes but giving
ways to fix them so here it goes.
your sentence structure can use some work
and there are quite a few typos in all the
chapters but especially chapter two.
also there were quite a few sentence problems in chapter two
if i were you i would go back and re-read
the first half of chapter two aloud. thats the best way
to see if somthing makes sense....i.e. if it dosnt
make sense when you read it out loud then
it dosnt make sense when other people read it.
its a trick i learned in creative writing...it always just
seems silly to speak those things out loud somtimes
...hmmm, try muttering...yea muttering helps
remember to spell check!
thanks for a great fick!
well i always like to have some somthing to add to these to help
improve the story. not just pointing out mistakes but giving
ways to fix them so here it goes.
your sentence structure can use some work
and there are quite a few typos in all the
chapters but especially chapter two.
also there were quite a few sentence problems in chapter two
if i were you i would go back and re-read
the first half of chapter two aloud. thats the best way
to see if somthing makes sense....i.e. if it dosnt
make sense when you read it out loud then
it dosnt make sense when other people read it.
its a trick i learned in creative writing...it always just
seems silly to speak those things out loud somtimes
...hmmm, try muttering...yea muttering helps
remember to spell check!
thanks for a great fick!
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October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well... wow.. this is an interesting story i got to say.
and I like that you let naruto l movie in with sasuke with his geen frogs and all ^__^
hope you'll update soon
and I like that you let naruto l movie in with sasuke with his geen frogs and all ^__^
hope you'll update soon
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October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooh man you just have to update this fic soon, it is sooo good, not that its allll sex, which is really really good btw, lol, but it has a plot a reason for Kakashi to screw Naruto, even if niether have feelings for each other, I really like this plot line, I have read alot of Naruto in heat fics and although they are good, they are mostly sex with little to no plot, not that I am complaining, AT ALL..lol...but I like to read a plot every now and then and this is the first Naru in heat one that I can recall really enjoying emensly, anyhow I really hope you update soon, I know you cant do an email alert, but I will look back and hope to find an update for this fic, ty for the great read, much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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September 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i love it,this is sooo uncommon! great job i can't wait til you update!
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August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi, just wanted to drop a line to say that "i like ur work" though the scenes with kakashi are very eye-riveting, i can't wait to see what the seals do to naruto later...until then..continue to wait for ur update.