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i like it i hope u update soon i want to know what happen next keep up the good work update soon

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I LUV THIS FIC~~!!

A possesive Sasuke ish a cute Sasuke~~

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o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o0o I vote ShikaIno and ShinoKiba~~!!

Update soon pwease~~!!

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*chuckles* Very clever idea, and well done, too. I look forward to seeing where you take this. ^^ Keep up the good work!!!

First off, I want to say that this is an awesome fic and I absolutely adore the concept of a possessive Sasuke leaving his mark –be it a love bite or the Uchiha seal—all over an indignant Naruto. It’s cute, it’s well written, and it’s relatively IN character (as IC as any Naru/Sasu fic can realistically be at least). Moreover, I love your varied sentence structure and use synonyms (SO many people just use ‘Naruto’ or ‘the blond’, for example). That having been said, you really need to read it through a little more and do some touch-up editing. There are relatively few grammar mistakes but the flow is choppy in one or two places. Keep in mind that I’m only saying this *because* you really have a well written fic here. With a lot of authors they’re so far gone that I don’t even bother mentioning it since NO amount of grammar and editing can make up for talent. You, however, are another breed altogether. Even if you leave it as it is, you already have the beginnings of a very good story. I just thought I’d give some *constructive* criticism since I think that with a little tweaking here and there (very little, mind you) it could be that much better. Anyway, I just wrote a long ass, high-handed review and feel kinda lame. So I will leave now. Thanks for posting!!!

Eagerly awaiting your next update,
~Jiro

P.S. ~I’d LOVE to see a prequel.

P.S.S. ~As for pairings, I’d *love* to see some one-sided GaaNaru or NejiNaru just so see what Sasuke’d do. Imagined (or real) ShikaNaru would be great too… I’m a Naruto whore. As long as my baby gets some luvin’ then I’m happy ^_-

nice fiction you virgin writers. I like it, a sasuke may be ooc, but it does fit him anyway ^^

lol, that is great you have to write more don't leave it hanging please!!!!!

I like this so far! I don't read a whole lot like it, so it caught my attention pretty much right away. :D Kudos! Hmm, other pairings? ShinoKiba! :D And maybe SakuLee. But Shikamaru belongs with Temari. *nodnod* Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter~

"Pairings: SasuNaru for now"

What do you mean, "for now"?

I think yu have something good going here. You need to work on the length though. Add more to it-like in the kissing scenes and stuff. I also think you have this whole possessive thing down pat, which is very good. I hope to read more of your story and arigato gozaimasu for writing it. ^_^!

Good start, hope you keep up the quality. Just practically ove the footnote. And a prequel would be superb! ^^