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great story update soon please

...............God

As I said before GREAT now that we got some action(if you know what I mean). We can get to a ninja fight or is this where the story ends.

AWESOME!!! Can't wait for more. And if I may point something out, just to spare you from further people saying it. How can Naruto (during the lime in the hotsprings) pinch Sakura's nipple, finger her, and trace her lips with his fingers when he only has two hands? *laughs* I liked the rest of it, you may just want to fix that......perhaps he can trace her lips with his tongue or something. Hope this helps and it wasn't a flame just FYI.

Update soon! If you want to read my stuff it's under HisBeautiful also under RedSliver (we're doing a bible of smut together, check it out!
-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful

Good stuff man, you worked that in pretty well.

That was yummy and WAFFy and everything ^_^ Great stuff, very sweet.

Finally, another chapter :) Awesome job, it was really sweet. Nice smut too ;)

hmmm, nicely done. I like the advancing plot and the fact that they're not screwing like bunnies off the get go. Of course, that's only b/c that's what I expected from this fic... a STORY not just smut.

So, update! I can't wait for the smut.......:)
good writing so far.

-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful

Awwww...... cute ending to the chapter...... This fic keeps getting better and better...... can't wait for the next chapter...... please update soon.