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YAY! You updated! Haku does have a point though, him and Itachi are kinda alike!

Update soon, okay? Great chapter but I've got to go to school now!! BYE!

Hn. I do like your story quite a bit (especially the first two chapters). The third chapter has a few problems though:
it's Jounin, not Jourin
Kisame is 29 (which means he would have been in his late teens during Zabuza's little massacre. . . and I highly doubt still genin) it says so in the character databook.
shinobi is one word (generally only one kanji too)
also there are quite a few typos and grammatical mistakes in this chapter (they're mostly small things that are often missed but. . .)

other than that: my impression had been that Zabusa had been an academy student, just too young or had failed to qualify for the exam, not a civilian (really, a civilian killing over 100 ninja, even very young and inexperienced ones. . . it's very hard to make that believable)

I don't have any problem at all with the rest of your Kisame backstory (actually giving him his brother to kill was probably a stroke of genius) just those few things that made me go, "errr, what?"

And. . . I do this out of love as a KisaIta fan! There are so few KisaIta stories out there so each one is very representative of the pairing (vs say SasuNaru where there are so many that you have to read a lot to get a good representation of the pairing). . . Good KisaIta will make more fans flock to it!

I love this story!!! ^_^ The writing is very well done and I'm glad that this chapter has some history on Kisame. I don't read Itachi/Kisame stories all that much, but this one is one I will follow until the end. I liked the conversation between Haku and Itachi. It's very interesting. I can't until I read more.

I really like this story! I have never read an ItaKisa that actually worked... this one I admit is weird because I am not quite used to the pairing, however I think the story is very predictable. I would be more than happy to be your beta, but I don't think I have enough time on my hands to help. Sorry, I hope you find one soon though. Great stroy. Keep up the awesome work! ^^

Really great story. Only two chapters and I'm already your fan. I really like your writing style and this story. Hope to see more, so continue to do your damn great job! See ya!

thats so sad!!! poor itachi!! he likes kisame and then beautiful haku comes along XO... aww thats sad... XOOOOo but good.. I CANT WAIT TILL YOU UPDATRE!

very well done, like last time. hope to see a sequel.

bravo.Totally(in my experiance unique),amusing,hot,odd ,great insightrant rave ect.What a mind you have and thank you for sharing it.Never would I think of this ,in fact I only know of one Itachi and Haku story,Itachi takes Haku from Zabuza.Know why do they have the same?boy/type in mind.The start was brilliant,creepy and god I was waiting for Kasame to push Itachi over the desk and...good thing he didn't.Kinda kills Itachi/Sasuke possibilities...or maybe not...hmmm.Do more pleeeease.This was soooo enjoyable,suspenceful...just didn't see any of it coming,well Itachi as the school girl was kinda apparent....how did he learn to move like that,Sharingan but details!!The first masterbation was so nerve racking.One thing intelligable(sp) means you CAN understand it.Unintelligable means the opposite,you can not comprehend said noise/speach/written matter ect.I asume you wanted Itachi not to understand what he said where as he did here Kisame say"not tonight I have a head ache"(laugh it is too die)

This is really entertaining. *grins* I didn't think anyone could make me like Kisume, but I really do. *laughs* And poor, crush-filled Itachi. I hadn't realized how *young* he was... *grins*

May I archive this?
http://tentative.net/JBMcDragon/Hidden_Village

Thanks!

J

hehehe XD niceeeee... actually, the only people that I can see Itachi liking are: Kisame [for two-sided; they're partners!!! ^^;;], and Sasuke and Naruto [both the two for one-sided love; since I really really adore SasuNaru] ^__^ I haven't seen an Itachi + Kisame fic before; it's always Kisame harboring the "unrequited and one-sided love"... Hahaha, Haku is Kisame's type?!!! *rolls off laughing* I bet Itachi had been cheering Kakashi and Naruto on when they battled against Haku XD Haha, and now, Itachi is striving hard to become effeminately, so damned beautiful!!! ^___^ Goodness, even though I'm a female myself, Itachi's vanity is really cooolll to read... :) Anyways, I hope you continue soon!!! KisaIta all the way!!!

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