rate_review Reviews

Applause!!! This was great, too. I don't always like AU stories and almost didn't read it but you handled it VERY WELL!!! VERY WELL!!! Must read more of your stories. Do you have a website????

OMFG!!! Holy shit!! I so did not see the whole 'it was Sasuke's dad' thing...wow that really threw me for a loop...All in all it was a good story, i felt like puking my guts out at somepoints and almost did once, but that's only cause Orochimaru is scary, and rape is scary and if you put the two together, you get one really sick fucked up images...The end of the chapter was cute and I'm seriously surprised that Hinata can ride a harley...I'll say one more thing and then i'll leave you alone...At one point i got so mad with the 'A club' peeps and the whole Uchiha family (except for Sasuke and Itachi) that I actually had to go downstairs and beat the hell out of my puching bag...

Ok, the bad first. Writing quality: not great. You need a beta reader for those spelling, grammar, and word choice mistakes. The flow could be better. And the balance between description/narrative and dialogue needs to be adjusted.

The good: I like the premise. The first line was interesting enough to draw me in, and I'm curious as to what will happen next. The poor boy in a rich school thing is nothing new, but it's a standard for a reason. I'll give it a few more chapters before I give a final opinion.

That was just unbelievably good! I have no words. I bow to your talents:)

Holy crapula, christ-hole...
O_O
XD KYAAA!! That was so so so so so so so good!!
I just read this entire story today.
You totally blew my brains away when I read that it was Sasuke's DAD that did it.(But, duh *hits self on head* that totally makes more sense) XD *gushes* I don't have ANYTHING bad to say about this story!!
And I was enormously amused when I read the original story outline (the one for when it was still planned to be a PWP). Those are some MEGA plot bunnies! XD
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*bribes plot bunnies for more with carrrots*
XD;;;

*close eyes* alright i would to say i wanted to cry a lot. I also was really upset about what happed with naruto and sasuke but i wanted to read all of before i jumped to any thing i hafe to say the ending was fitting for it im glad that Itachi killed that sank basted as if i hated him as it was danm also i have a lil more recsctp for saukra now it touched me how she helped him with out a sec thought and as for hatina she just kicks ass and i loved it how she yelled at that lady to help naruto and also when she stole that guys keys and kissed saukra yeah that was shocker would have never thougt of that one. i would also like to add that i almost went nuts when sasuke found out about his famliy it was very shocking and it had me very lost but it made since to me as some part of the story and it also drew me in on how sasuke was trying to help naruto i must say i was drawn in but more upset it was good story yes but some fo it just upset me some but that’s aright i mean it all ending good right? and for the 2nd prat i would like to see how there relship goes on for on in the story i also would to add it had a lot of feeling to it and i just was not sure how i would reacked to all of it but after ending it seems to have some feeling to it made want to cry and after much loss of sleep and ranting at my net i would say it was wroth reading when it all end good to were they was self and ok. i also look frowed to more of your fan fic in the over time even thow this one had me very sad i steel like how they found well to surive and be to gather tell the end also Itachi letter was sad but touching how he was willing to do all of that for sasuke to pertaked him from the same hurbble fate he had to go thow at first i was kind annoyed that he killed every one but i fully unstained now and why he did it and i would say that if i was him i would hafe to do something to im just glad it was not him that hurt naruto after all i mean he done some things but i didn’t think he would go that low ether so its relief that it was not like i thought i also want to add that you had me very surprised some of the time and shocked to you seems to very good at that heh well any ways that’s all i have to say hope to read more of your story’s soon.

I really, really liked this. :3 There were some grammatical errors that threw me off a few times, but not enough to detract from the sheer need-based relationship that you set up between Sasuke and Naruto. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, and hopefully you'll write something just as good as this. It absorbed me for the better part of last night, and although I had to turn away for a moment from some of the more brutal parts, I still enjoyed this immensely. Maybe more than I should have. XD

Keep writing, because you rock at it,

Kit

A sequel please, or perhaps just an epilogue...one where Sasuke goes and sees Itachi...and Sasuke and Naruto are, well, together. PLEASE! I would really like to see it. I loved this story, especially the parts with Tsunade and Jiraiya. You should really write a story that stars those two since you write them so well. Thanks for taking the time to write this, I MUST go read broken soon (its been in my 'stories to read' bookmark folder forever.

damn, the whole time i've been reading this story, my eyes would tear up and i'd have to stop reading. i love this story, so much. i like how sakura and hinata got together, since they're a cute but unlikely couple. and who doesn't like sasuke and naruto? and good job with making itachi the good guy in this. if you ever make a sequel, which i would totally read, then i would hope that he be in it. it would be sad though if sasuke visited him when he's about to die... poor kid, he just can't get a break from the angst. and i love how tsunade and jiriaya are getting married and adopting naruto. i hope everything works out for them :)

now to go check out ur other fics!

-inc

You are one awsome fucking writer! Woot!