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August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome beyond words! I always love a good naruto tort/rape fic ^____^. Update soon please!
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August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn, good story!! KK keep freaken writing it eeek!!! Sasuke better be nicer!*shakes fist* he's being a big jerk!
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August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
whoa. that is one seriously fucked up day. you've definitely caught my attention with this one. now, i've got all these questions running through my head.... like is orochimaru naruto's surprise visitor? will the stranger offer naruto some fucked up deal in order to get in his pants or will naruto be raped? will sakura ever stop being a whiney ass bitch? sorry, i couldn't help it. ^_^ anyway, nice work, so far. looking foward to your next update.
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August 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh btw I'm not sure you care, but your spelled another wrong in the title.
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad.....its goin'2 b orochimaru ritez? *shivers* lol....great job!!! please update soon!
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
man that was just harsh! i cant wait for the next chapter i wonder what orochimaru will do to naruto-kun in the next chap? and how in the world did he suddenly turn up in naruto-kuns room? i hope you write a long nice chap next time that way i can see what other sadistic and masocistic tendencies will turn up gambatte! ^_^.
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh shit poor naruto good first start keep up the great work and update soon can't wait to read what happens next
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A very good first chapter. Tell me, you really like Naruto to be rape and abuse, don't you? ;). I really like broken, you've got a really good writing, so this promise to be good. PLease continue. I think I already tell you that with "Broken" but I HATE Orochimaru! Kill him! Kill him! Kill him! I love how you describe Sasuke as a cold bastard and Naruto as a not-so-weak-but-weak-noneless (I don't know how to tell that) and proud little guy who need is Super-Susuke! Niark. Anyway, good luck! Ja!
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That's a really interesting start.
I like it's being set in our reality and Sakura being Naruto's friend.
I just hope you won't torment Naruto too much, "Broken" is a masterpiece in this field
and there's no need for you to try to outdo yourself in this aspect LOL
I spotted a few grammatical mistakes like "there" instead of 'they're' or 'their' and 'into' written separately.
Otherwise it's fine. And it's intriguing :)
I like it's being set in our reality and Sakura being Naruto's friend.
I just hope you won't torment Naruto too much, "Broken" is a masterpiece in this field
and there's no need for you to try to outdo yourself in this aspect LOL
I spotted a few grammatical mistakes like "there" instead of 'they're' or 'their' and 'into' written separately.
Otherwise it's fine. And it's intriguing :)
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August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Blah. I hate Orochimaru, this story looks fairly interesting. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
-Oubilette
-Oubilette