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for Smile

by Kyuunoki

person caro8
schedule September 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really enjoyed it. I liked how you wrote it out of both perspectives. The Sasuke one was my fave. With him saying how he doesn't want Naruto to love him, and how he turned away so quickly so Naruto wouldn't see his smile.

It was great. I can't wait to see more of your stuff.
person Fan
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
...isn't 'yuri' for girl/girl? Am I wrong in this? I like the story... but I think wrong category? Maybe? Sorry if not!!!
person spare
schedule September 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. The emotion was very well-done, with just the right amount of intensity and introspection to keep a reader... well, reading. ^^; Good writing here. Short, but very memorable. Naruto angsty and Sasuke... angstier, still, but a very believable angsty.
person Jaxxy
schedule September 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
My eyes are pricked with tears.
What a *lovely* interpretation of the way that could go! That's an IC story I can really buy into.
I'm speechless really ::weak laugh:: that was simply beautiful.
I hope you have more stuff..

<3Jaxxy<3!!! !! !
person Tatemshope
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! I really like it. It's amazing how right on your are with the characterizations! I'm very very impressed. I'm just WAY too sappy to ever be able to let people act like themselves in my stories! I really wish I could write more like you.
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...cute. Very cute. Well done.

-Oubliette
person onefreak
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I Loved your story ^^
person Mostflogged
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
There has never been a better welcome back gift than this. And letting me Beta something in the same day, what more could a fangirl ask for? The last two sentences were Perfect with capitalization, they were just so Sasuke. Every time you write something like this I thank every deity I know that you're a yaoi fangirl. If you weren’t writing of this caliber would be a very convincing argument for the side of het.
person macy
schedule August 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was sad ;____; But I can totally see Sasuke thinking that way.
person RCJ
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sasuke is too... cold...
but this could be a nice prologue of something here... do u intend to make some kind of sequel?