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This is great - please keep going! I was confused at first. I thought "Gee, so quick. Is the story going to end so soon?" But now it makes sense and I'm so glad that there's going to be more!

aww this was such a sweet chapter! It gives a real insight in Kakashi's feelings.
Please update soon!

I think that, despite your assertions that this latest chapter should be confusing, it was too confusing to follow easily. You're likely to lose your reader... a little confusion is all right, but too much and you have them trying to figure out what you're trying to say, not following along with the characters. it almost feels like you took the story in a way you weren't expecting, and couldn't quite bring yourself to totally discard it. ^^ Not that I blame you, it was quite sweet, but the whole "dream sequence," when coupled with the very brief explanation of what really happened, had me quite thrown off the trail of the story. If you really want to keep the dream, you might make the explanation of what really happened a little more distinct, so it overshadows the dream.

Other than that and quite a lot of tense confusion in eariler chapters, you've got a wonderful story developing here. I'm curious to see where you take it.

oh, and one more thing (I'm only commenting this much because I like your story, believe it or not.... ^^ please don't take this to mean I don't!) You might want to be more vauge in Iruka's reasons for cutting. Most people who do aren't nearly so clear about the reasons, especially when they're drunk out of their minds ^^

Kakashi’s eyes shot wide open, confusion and uncertainty flooding his senses. He sat up and looked around his familiar surroundings. Wasn’t he--- hadn’t he---? He shook his head and looked around the room just to be sure. He sighed in disappointment. He was back in his own apartment, in his own bed, with no sign of Iruka anywhere. He sighed in disappointment. So, it was just another dream.

~~when i read this i screamed "WHAT?!!" everyone in the room was staring at me XD i so glad you updated, damn you for tricking me, but i hope everything ends happily in the end ^__^ please update soon

I really liked your story, it was well written and full of feelings dark and deep. I am longing to read next chapter.
Thank you for writing this story.

Ah! Why must you torture us like this! You can't just leave it hanging like that! Update! Update!

It was really great , as the other chapters. The characters are really well done but the ending was really frustrating... What happen next ??? Please, keep going !

I swear to fucking god!!!! If you quit this story I will hunt you down!!! I luv this story and how dare you leave at that kiss!!!!!!! Ahhhhhhh!!!!! Im losing my mind!!!!!! I want to know whats going to happen!!!!!! T_T! Pleaze Pleaze!!!!!! Update soon!!!!!!!!

P.s: I hope that didn't sound like an indirect threat. ^.^;

Great story!!!!! KakaIru is my fav Naruto pairing by far, and you write it so well!! I've never thought of Iruka as a suicidal person, but now that I think about it, it's scarily possible. Keep writing so I can read more!!!
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