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Well their very OCC, You need to really catch their charater and use discription of body movement and reaction.

I like the fic a lot please write more as soon as possible.

*smiles* That was really good. Can't wait for the next update.

I love your writting. Simple as that. It's beautiful and amazing and I seriously can't get over how well written that was. Please update as soon as you get a chance, until then, i'll be back here everyday to re-read that chapter till I have it burned into my memory.

Ah! this is very nice! I like the way you portray Naruto. I think it fits with the situation very well! There are a couple of places where the word flow was a bit funny, but over all it was very very nice! This part: "Beautiful and delicate fingers move across my AB's and lower..." I think it might flow better using the word "abdomen"... I hear "abs" and it makes me think of work out videos...*chuckle* but don't mind me...I'm overly picky sometimes... d(^-^)b Anyway...I like this! The pace is good and the scenario is plausible. (even though i prefer Naruto "on top") *snicker* Keep up the good work!

nice first chapter, i look forward to more ^_^

Naruto seems rather out-of-character, don't you think? o.o;;; Rather deep, he's being. I like it, but a quick question: is English your first language? The flow seems rather odd and jittery, so I was just wondering. ^^;

I would think Sasuke would be gentle,his experiances up to 8 where physically gentle,except for training.His persona is that,a persona well not his jealousy and hatred of his bro,that was brewing anyway however he was never taught rough touch and was a loving boy.Sigh,a waste..well hope in the end its not.I like this,his seduction of Naruto just through references was warm and the whole thing is sensual.Good job.Naruto has insight too.

Beautiful and delicious imagery and characterization. I love the thoughts Naruto had during his love-making with Sasuke. Also, simply adore uke Naruto! Hope to see more of your work in the Naruto catagory in the future!

First reviewer!!! W00t!!! I loved this story!! =D Seems kinda of sad...and if it wasn't suppose to be...then...i dunno. xD
-Prays there is no character death-