rate_review Reviews

That was h-o-double t HOTT! lol ^_^ lol

I LOVE THIS FIC!! SO GREAT!! KEEP WRITING!

Great Story!

~adios~

wah... that. was. HOT. loved it, really. hurray for you!!! and for our two boys for getting it on.... :P

ok now I've got to say your one good writter. How you depicted the ascending tension between the boys was amazingly well done. From the ramen shop to the sparring contest and to the playful wrestling match turning to exploration of their mutual desires. But, where I kinda got let down was at the actual sex scene. First of all, I don't know what others think but there is actually more to sex than penetration and if I think that whitout any knowledge of proper, valuable knowledge to initiate said penetration either but would jump to the conclusion that anal penetration would be their only way to get off. That said I suppose you are the author and have the final word as to what should happen between those two. That said, the second complaint I have to add is the fact that water is not lube however you wanna put it. I know that introducing lubrification in a fic can be awkward and hard to pull off but I need to remind you that anal sex, if expressed as a pleasurable act for both partners, needs lubrification and water, even though it is liquid, is not nearly slick enough to ease the insertion of a penis in a rectum (especially for a virgin which Naruto clearly is). Im sorry if this review seems harsh, I don't mean any arm by it. I very seldomly (I know i'm ashame) take the time to review any fanfiction but this needed my intervention. You really, truely are a good writter and it would be a pleasure to read from you again. Your story hook me like there is no tomorrow right until the actual sex act itself. I was cringing like mad at the atrocity both boys must have felt at having sex, for the first time at that, with not lube. Again i"m sorry about being a bitch but do know that I believe in constructive criticism and your fiction are really worth me sacrificing myself if I can say it like that. I've let my e-mail address in my review, if you ever feel like talking about it, feel free to mail me and i'll glady help you out.

Thanks for reading this and in hope of
reading something from you again.


-MoOdSwInG

P.S. English is my second language so my ideas my have gone through a bit weirdly. Hope you understood anyways.

Heh.This fic is growing on me.I totally missed the "same boat...ship" part.Too amusing.Tre joley!

*drools* that was amazing and so hot *has a very happy smile on her face*

that was good! ^_^ very nice!
sasuke's such a pervert!

well keep writing!
~Evil_Ramen_of_Doom

That was great. It was funny, cute, sweet, and HOT!!! I loved this, the summery does not do it justice!!! This was soooooooo incredilbly well written. And I am Gald you did not make Naruto a total idiot. I love this story. I hope you write more. Keep up the good work.

Hey it's me. I really like your story. Thanks for writing it for me. (though you did not menation that in your notes) It's okay I forgive you. I know how forgetful you are. I only know because the line blurs. Keep it up.*nice guy pose* *teeth sparkle*