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November 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hey, cool start. I hope you keep writing. i like the way you describe the rainstorm and the village, it makes you feel like you're there. very cool.
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January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was really good...I don't know what else to tell you, I enjoyed it.
Hm. Naruto's always slutty (I know, I know) and Sasuke is always stalker-esque. Now what does that say about fandom?
Hm. Naruto's always slutty (I know, I know) and Sasuke is always stalker-esque. Now what does that say about fandom?
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December 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was such a good fic, please write more!
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November 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! 3 things stood out to me in this that I thought you did very nicely:
1) humor - lines like "It seemed appropriate, somehow, that Naruto settled in the Hokage's nostril. He really was a little snot sometimes. Sasuke smirked." had me chuckling out loud.
2) simile (I suppose that's the best term) - ""Mm?" the raven-hair replied, glancing casually over at his friend and finding himself, once more, alarmed at how like the rain the blonde was -- one minute, far away, the next, upon them."
3) description - all over the place and detailed enough that everything is easy to visualize and it paints a very pretty picture.
This is amazing because of your writing style alone, and I can't wait for more, if more is coming. If not... well, I'll be peeking at your other works anyway. ^.^
1) humor - lines like "It seemed appropriate, somehow, that Naruto settled in the Hokage's nostril. He really was a little snot sometimes. Sasuke smirked." had me chuckling out loud.
2) simile (I suppose that's the best term) - ""Mm?" the raven-hair replied, glancing casually over at his friend and finding himself, once more, alarmed at how like the rain the blonde was -- one minute, far away, the next, upon them."
3) description - all over the place and detailed enough that everything is easy to visualize and it paints a very pretty picture.
This is amazing because of your writing style alone, and I can't wait for more, if more is coming. If not... well, I'll be peeking at your other works anyway. ^.^
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh Yeah! I love all the sex pairing to pick! Gaara and Naruto *drool* oh and Sasuke-kun and Naru-kun...yummmmy oh and dear lord...yeah...bring on Neji baby! update! oh yeah update update update update!!!!!!! pleaseeeee...i'ma beggin ya!
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
sumthin.....na just kidding. update soon i love sasu naru, and reading on ffnet means there arent many of them so update soon
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I thought it was beautiful! And I definatly want to read what comes after it, so please, update soon!
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like the way you write!
continue please!
i like neji naru~ let them get together! although i also think sasunaru should prevail at the last...
continue please!
i like neji naru~ let them get together! although i also think sasunaru should prevail at the last...
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another short yet sweet little story. Nice job.
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September 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow....that was great. a bit short, but beautiful, and very well written. i do hope you continue this, cuz this would make a great story. i do remember one time you telling me that you always complete all your fics. hmmmm.......-squits eyes at Nachi-
anyway, this was really good. and you're right, our favorite little kyuubi does need attention. i just finished number 7, and all it was about was Sasuke! don't get me wrong, i love him to little bloody pieces, but shouldn't at least some of the story belong to Naruto? i mean, it is called Naruto, not Sasuke!
but i digress. continue, or i'll hound you down the wild, sexy animal you are! (notice i didn't call you cute that time?)
anyway, this was really good. and you're right, our favorite little kyuubi does need attention. i just finished number 7, and all it was about was Sasuke! don't get me wrong, i love him to little bloody pieces, but shouldn't at least some of the story belong to Naruto? i mean, it is called Naruto, not Sasuke!
but i digress. continue, or i'll hound you down the wild, sexy animal you are! (notice i didn't call you cute that time?)