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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
O_O Need... more... Sequel, please? XD
Your writing style is excellent, and yay for good spelling and grammar! Iruka is so adorable, and Kakashi is just HOT. The end. :P
Your writing style is excellent, and yay for good spelling and grammar! Iruka is so adorable, and Kakashi is just HOT. The end. :P
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November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
:3 I'd like to see a follow up story with Iruka on a leash. XD Thanks for the yummy read. (:
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February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please tell me your writing more of this...it was so HOT
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December 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This was absolutely lovely! Sweet and Hot and incredibly sexy. You captured Jiraiya's personality and sense of humor perfectly. I adore Kakashi and Iruka pairings and this story made me grin with delight.
Your writing style is very descriptive and the characterizations were marvelous. I do not consider this a PWP for the simple fact that you also described their fears, wants and needs in the story. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
Hugs
Amy
Your writing style is very descriptive and the characterizations were marvelous. I do not consider this a PWP for the simple fact that you also described their fears, wants and needs in the story. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
Hugs
Amy
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November 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is way beyond awemazing. You have a wonderful talent for writing, it's a joy to read over and over. I couldn't stop til then end! This is SO going to be a fav of mine. Once again fantasic job! Wow.
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October 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heheh, okay, that took me one and a half hours to read. What a story. Seriously not a bad job. It has enough angst to make you wonder if the characters are really that fucked up and such a sweet kind of ending. And a topping Iruka is soooo rare.
I wish I could think of mere things to comment on, but I'm completly out of words. Once again, great job.
^^V
I wish I could think of mere things to comment on, but I'm completly out of words. Once again, great job.
^^V
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October 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You write very well, but you are very wordy and sometimes your thoughts get a little cloudy. This was very fun in the beginning, but the sex scene is way too long and drawn out, and not in a good way. Try to be a little more consice when it comes to somethings. Do not get me wrong I love your descriptive nature, but after a while you get very repetitive. I hope you keep writing because you a very good. Just think about the suggestions.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love how the forplay was original and creative and it LASTED! It was great. I think you guys need to write a sequel with the leash O_O
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Sweet, Funny, and still Incrediably Hot! I love it!
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
what the heck?! this only has 2 reviews?! what the hell is wrong with these people?! anyway, this was good, damn good. i loved the way it was the nice and drawn out love making session, iruka deserves, and not some random fuck fest. you protrayed their characters beautifully and captured their personalities very well. the grammar was good as well. overall, this was an excellent one-shot worthy of having a sequel. ^__^ so i'll looking foward to seeing more works like this one from you featuring a different pairing *coughs*gaaranaru or shikanaru*coughs* may the yaoi gods watch over you.
~Devious
~Devious