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December 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey! Please update thiss soon! I love the story and hinataxNaruto rules! Yay Naruto-Kun! ^___^
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November 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cool story! update soon!
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Eheh...
'Tis a good story, seems to be well-written, just wish that the chapters were a bit longer, or that you had a bit more of them ;-)
Honestly, I'm curious as to how this story is going to turn out. Will the Hyuuga Clan still hate Naruto, even tho he's the Hokage due to the Kyuubi, or will they accept him?
'Tis a good story, seems to be well-written, just wish that the chapters were a bit longer, or that you had a bit more of them ;-)
Honestly, I'm curious as to how this story is going to turn out. Will the Hyuuga Clan still hate Naruto, even tho he's the Hokage due to the Kyuubi, or will they accept him?
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October 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This looks to be a very interesting story and I hope that you continue it in its complete form.
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update, I am especially fond of NaruHina fics, and I've read quite a few lemons on my own so I'm hoping this one will turn out well.
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
me and my bro love this story plz make more!!!!!!!
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i like this story 5/5
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This so needed to be longer...But it's good work so far, despite the few mistakes here and there.
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Although I thank you for adding to the NaruHina pairing, which is rare to find around here, I must be sincere and tell you that I don't like this story. It's very bad, and even if you just want to throw them into bed together, you should embellish it a little. Konoha isn't that big that Hinata cannot go home if they're on the other side of the village. And an ANBU exam should be much more than just pummeling a training dummy. Also, if you're gonna mention a past relationship of Hinata's, don't be done in just 2 lines, either tell more about why Hinata did it and how it was, or don't mention that relationship at all. Else, it looks like a patch thrown there for no reason.
You began the story impliying that Naruto and Hinata aren't even friends, and yet suddenly Naruto wants to bed her. That's not in Naruto's character. Also, he just suddenly was aware of Hinata's feelings. That doesn't look smooth.
Sincerely, I think you should edit this story a lot before continuing.
You began the story impliying that Naruto and Hinata aren't even friends, and yet suddenly Naruto wants to bed her. That's not in Naruto's character. Also, he just suddenly was aware of Hinata's feelings. That doesn't look smooth.
Sincerely, I think you should edit this story a lot before continuing.
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October 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Update soon please. In my opion ther aren't enogh Naruto/Hinata fics out there. Plus I wanna to see him as Hokage.