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August 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg that's so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet!!!!! And the ending, i think it gave me a cavity. :o aawuouch! You know there is something about it though. You kept giving people the possesive trait. I know, I know, many ppl use so they can add/or use little scenes were the possesive one out of the couple would glare, grab their lover, snarl, make shifty eyes as they drag their lover to the darkerst corner of the room so no know can see them.... yada yada yada.
But it REALLY only works on certain types of people. The main ones would be sasuke, neji, and garra. They have that "backoff that's mine look" where as if you see shino doing that i'd be really wierd or shikamaru. Even the whole jealous thing dosn't siut kiba. He'd look more natural if he were to worry a bit.
Not the " omg they're going to leave me any moment!!!!0.0'" type but the " nervous kinda laughing someone does when they're embarrased or not trying to show their true emotions. You know laugh it off kinda thing"
I know it's hard trying to show that a characters cares for someone but think of it this way. If you truly love someone wouldn't you trust them to be faithful and know in the pit of your heart you're the only one they'll love?
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.... stop looking at me like that! I'm serious!!!!! >.< well i always thought reviews had to have some "real" pointers eh? I hope this helps. Oh and if you're interesred in some story ideas i have TONS of them i'm just too lazy to actually start any. hehe keep up the good work!
But it REALLY only works on certain types of people. The main ones would be sasuke, neji, and garra. They have that "backoff that's mine look" where as if you see shino doing that i'd be really wierd or shikamaru. Even the whole jealous thing dosn't siut kiba. He'd look more natural if he were to worry a bit.
Not the " omg they're going to leave me any moment!!!!0.0'" type but the " nervous kinda laughing someone does when they're embarrased or not trying to show their true emotions. You know laugh it off kinda thing"
I know it's hard trying to show that a characters cares for someone but think of it this way. If you truly love someone wouldn't you trust them to be faithful and know in the pit of your heart you're the only one they'll love?
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.... stop looking at me like that! I'm serious!!!!! >.< well i always thought reviews had to have some "real" pointers eh? I hope this helps. Oh and if you're interesred in some story ideas i have TONS of them i'm just too lazy to actually start any. hehe keep up the good work!
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January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol, that was so sweet and absolutely hilarious. I loved it. Keep up the good work and update soon.
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Cute, Sappy but cute. A few missed used words, but that was probably just spell check, but make sure to reread it a few times before posting.
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October 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THis is quite cute. When writint a summery do not say that what is written is bad, then people don't want to read it. I almost passed it but the words "Naruto" and "yaoi" got my attention. This is pretty good. Even if you think it sucks, lie ok?