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November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Poetic, but which het pairing is this? I have guessed...
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November 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was nice. :D
But, there were a couple of problems. First of all, there was no clear definition whatsoever of what the coupling was, so I can only guess, now, really, unless I'm coming off as being a bit thick. You can imagine that it would be a bit annoying reading this in-depth story about their feelings for each other when these two people are mysteries, indeed.
Secondly, you didn't really firmly define the sexual scene as distinctly as you could have, but I'm fine with that. It's just a personal preference anyway, so it would be best to ignore it. xD
There were a few errors in grammar and sentence composition, but overall, I enjoyed the "short and sweet" feel of it.
Keep up the good work, try and keep those things in check, and keep writing fanfiction!
-Nevada tan ='..'=
But, there were a couple of problems. First of all, there was no clear definition whatsoever of what the coupling was, so I can only guess, now, really, unless I'm coming off as being a bit thick. You can imagine that it would be a bit annoying reading this in-depth story about their feelings for each other when these two people are mysteries, indeed.
Secondly, you didn't really firmly define the sexual scene as distinctly as you could have, but I'm fine with that. It's just a personal preference anyway, so it would be best to ignore it. xD
There were a few errors in grammar and sentence composition, but overall, I enjoyed the "short and sweet" feel of it.
Keep up the good work, try and keep those things in check, and keep writing fanfiction!
-Nevada tan ='..'=