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(I review as I read.)

Part 1: Interesting how it starts off without a word between them. ____ It’s a little hard to tell what’s going on, though. Did Sasuke have a nightmare or something? ____ I’m guessing Sasuke is still kind of little in this story. ____ Huh. I like how it gives very few details about what’s happening. It’s not the most explicit, but the implications … the implications say a lot and make it creepier than if it spelled out the details. And then it fades to a few days later. ____ The scene at the dinner table … there’s a secret between Itachi and Sasuke. And their parents aren’t aware. Good way of plotting out the scenes by leaving certain things out and letting the readers fill in the blanks. ____ Heh—when Itachi said “I need your help,” all I could think was “uh-oh.” ____ I like Sasuke’s response and how it then says “because there is no other answer.” It hints that Sasuke’s uncomfortable about it. ____ I like how Sasuke is portrayed. He’s not a clueless, happy kid that I see in a lot of Uchihacest stories. I like how serious he is. That was what I always liked about him in the manga—he was serious. ____ Sword, huh? That’s new. ____ Heh—the sword made me all nervous, but then he just puts it away. Nice. ____ The mood is dark, but not angsty. I like it. It’s not easy to achieve that. ____ Worship … but not total servitude. The kind of worship Sasuke seems to feel for Itachi goes deeper than a lot of Uchihacest fics I’ve read. ____ What’s also spooky is that it’s hard to figure out what Itachi’s plotting. Something sexual, of course, but is it handjob? Oral? Or all the way to “third base”? (Man, it feels awkward, saying that, lol.) ____ Awww … in other words, he’s not going to explain a thing to Sasuke.

Part 2: Nice bit where dad attends “without urging from Itachi.” ____ “Widdled down”—I think it’s “whittled down”. ____ “Head of the Clan”. I like the Title. =) ____ Nice imagery on how Sasuke perceives his mother. I wonder if that was ever true. ____ Hehehe, same beginning as Part 1. ____ Huh—Sasuke’s getting a little more of an attitude. Of course, he’s 10 now, and used to the situation. Makes sense that he’d give Itachi some lip. ____ I like the slight delay before Itachi says “You’re going to be a genin tomorrow.” And then another one before “Congratulations.” The pacing is perfect. ____ First light, and Itachi is watching him. Creepy. I thought he’d still be asleep, though it makes sense that he’d wake up around this time as well. ____ Hmm. Weird. What was that all about? Mikoto was about to ask something, and then Itachi interrupts … and there’s a slight flash of Sharingan. Very mysterious. ____ Ooooh, I like. Sasuke brushing Itachi off. ____ I don’t know what’s going on with Mikoto; what is she trying to say? Is Itachi scaring her into not speaking or something? ____ “Sasuke thinks that even with a cup of tea cradled in his palms Itachi looks dangerous.” I don’t think so, but it might just be how Sasuke regards Itachi. Sasuke’s lived with him, after all, and knows more about him. ____ Heh—showing him the finger now. XD ____ “You were basically telling Itachi to shut up in a very rude way.” Yeah … but wouldn’t Sasuke wonder what the big deal is? ____ Ahh, she wants to talk to him about Itachi. Does she suspect? ____ Hah! Itachi’s got a nervous habit! =D I like that, and how he picked it up from his mom. ____ Interesting decision. ____ Kakashi, eh? ____ Huh? … What happened? It just … ended…. I feel like the story froze…. Dang it, I wanna know what happens next.


Well, apart from the ending (which felt incomplete to me), the story was VERY well-written. I love how it wasn’t totally explicit and hinted at things. Somehow, I felt the characters were very involved. This is the kind of thing one would want more of. Good job.

Intresting twist. Another chapter soon, I should hope.

i really like it! a lot!! YAY!!! PLEASE CONTINUE! This is like mi favorite story.

I've come to the conclusion that you HAVE to update this!? Please Please pleeaaaasseeeee.. I love you forever. It's so good!

please tell me you will write more!?
I loooooooooooooooooooved it!

Way interesting.I am glad for this,his mother should have protected him better in the manga.Hope you continue soon.I iove the boys of course.Sasuke will die if Itachi slaughters the clan...maybe.We will see eh?

Brilliant! Oh more,Some bathroom action would be nice.Doing Sasuke inpublic definitely.I do not want him to go to the dance unless he dances with Sasuke.Umm,a visit to a fetish club with Sas in drag would be cool.If Itachi gets hold of some x and they go out.Photography.maybe Itachi is an artist.

oh!! i really like this story!!! update soon 'cause i wanna read more itasasu and i want sasuke-kun to meet kakashi soon! how will itachi react to the news!! i can't wait!

heh , this story ' ll have Itanaru ? I love them