rate_review Reviews

awww... poor naruto getting compared to sasuke... stop sakura from bitching about!!! this is good! i rated 4!!!

buuuuuuuuuuuuuut... you DO need help. ggod for a start, but hey, no ones perfect right? ^^

what is this? It's too short, and uh, no offense but I think you need to rewrite it O-o . . . . . I mean . . . yeah . . . cheesh, you're just being plain lazy. . . . it has potential for so much more . . . has a good title name tho

Um... first of all, I can't really consider this a story. It's too short and there's not even a semblance of a plot. Secondly, the warning you included for language was probably more appropriate than you intended. Please remember to check for grammar and spelling. Honestly, it doesn't even look like you tried.

Man, you should get a beta or something...you really need to check your spelling and sentence structure. When someone talk you start with " and end with ". And please get the names right. Who's sasukse...did you mean Sasuke? saskuse-un ...should be Sasuke-kun. And try to make it a little longer. Since it's so short I don't know what to say about the story plot and all. I could give you a much better opinion IF you redo this whole chapter again. Ja.