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Just to let you know, I was gonna read this newest chapter until I read your author's note.

It's all good and well the story is au...


MOST Naruto stories are au...

But most of us reading are not stupid. And, common sense tell you to keep something you don't "understand" filed in, so that when you get to the a/n at the END to then read through them.

It was just a suggestion, and the a/n was slightly rude.

this is a funny story...and is very interesting sofar i want to more!
i can't wait for the next chapter update soon :)

AHAHAHAHHAHAAQHAHAHAHAHA!!!! Ok, I want more!!! Yes, I loved it!!! AHAHAHA!!! And my guess is.....crap, why didn't I look at the town's name......Oh hell, out on a limb here. Narutard? Is that it? I'm an ass. Forget it. I suck. LOVE THE STORY THOUGH!!! ^^

Blah. Shame on me. Personally, I don't mind the spelling errors nor do the Author comments bother me. It's actually kinda nifty having them there. I like learning small details of other cultures. And every so once in a while, it is nice to read a story without a lot of detail or a real in depth plot and just let your mind fill in the rest of the pervy stuff you like. But that is just me. I think by writing it this way, it forces those of us with no imagination to actually try to use it! We have to fill in the blanks. And I am really starting to appreciate that.

Oh yes yes yes!!!! This is so good! I love everything! Naruto speeding for his râmen, trying to avoid paying, seducing Sasuke by showing his ass and scandalize with the prospect to have to blow him, totally like him, cute idiot prankster. And Sasuke, young cop trying to escape city and his fangirls, cold and strict but also a pervert having to deal with a demon Sasuke in leather pants and an angel Sasuke, who is also a pervert, even if he doesn't want to be one. It's funny, cute and it do some good to read something as well written but not torturing, just something to make you smile and waiting impatiently for the next chapter. You make them exactly how I like them to be. As for the name of the town, I don't know, I think somewhere sunny, green, quiet but not to much, with not too many poeple, well something aqcuin to Konoha but in a modern and no-ninja way, maybe in California. But really, I'm French so I don't know so many american towns. Anyway, good luck! Ja ne!

BWAHAHAHAHA....OMG This is so so so hilarously funny. I love it!!! Want more!!!

*Freak anime fangirl eyes* MUST.HAVE.NEXT.CHAPTER! That was so funny. I need that DVD lmao *plans to find Devil Sasuke and steal his DVD O.o ....plus take a photo...Hello shirtless Sasuke!)

Keep up the good work. lol I sound like a teacher ^_^

I don't think I've seen this particular storyline done in this fandom before, and the whole idea is very intereting indeed. Unfortunately the execution of it doesn't go as smoothly as anyone would like. Your grammar and spelling are something that desperately cry out for a spell check and a beta reader. And those author's notes.
I swear I was seeing red by the third one. It's nice that you realize that AFF is in fact a very international site, but explaining things to foreigners you seem to think completely ignorant isn't very nice. Especially when those facts are completely irrelevant to the story! You don't have to slap in a name and then tell us it's a supermarket when you could've just written supermarket in the first place. And there are plenty of other specifics that just hinder the general flow of the story...
The only carrying strength of this fic are the very amusing characterizations, which are true enough to the originals but have that nice hint of stereotype in them. You really should pay a lot more attention the build up of the story, as well as general descriptions, instead of just focusing on having Naruto in your home town.

Oh, fun!!! I like the idea- very AU, but cute... are you guys going to do a short series, then? Maybe throw in some Kakairuka action later? Ha. Ja ne!

-rofl-Please continue with the story.It's very interesting.