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November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
absolutely lovely!
but who's POV was i reading?
^____^
loved the whole..him *him* thing.
but who's POV was i reading?
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loved the whole..him *him* thing.
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November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved this even if it was short as all crap. Please you have to update, maybe something with chapters next time. Anyhoo, love your threesomes, keep up the good work and update soon...very very soon.
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November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kawaii!!!
i like this! it dosnt need smut its just good as it is
i LIKE you not using any name other then sakura
so their is no definate idea who the narrator is, implying that
they think of each other just as HIM or THAT person
its so intimate when you do it that way, and most people
here have a hard time understanding that.
the character loves the other and feels so much for the
other that they dont NEED to define them with a name or appelation
although you COULD clean it up a little, there were parts where
you wernt exactly sure what was happening because the words
just seemed to get a little mixed up. You could clarify in parts just what was happening
a little thats all
i like this! it dosnt need smut its just good as it is
i LIKE you not using any name other then sakura
so their is no definate idea who the narrator is, implying that
they think of each other just as HIM or THAT person
its so intimate when you do it that way, and most people
here have a hard time understanding that.
the character loves the other and feels so much for the
other that they dont NEED to define them with a name or appelation
although you COULD clean it up a little, there were parts where
you wernt exactly sure what was happening because the words
just seemed to get a little mixed up. You could clarify in parts just what was happening
a little thats all
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November 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I've never really been into NaruSakuSasu, but as I was rabidly trying to avoid studying for finals (one of which I have in exactly an hour and a half), I decided to check out your story. And surprised myself in that I liked it, and was not bothered by the parts that involved Sakura. I'm usually strictly SasuNaru (I like other pairings within the fandom, just usually not het ones), but you may just ease me into this pairing. Great job, I'll look forward to more from you.