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You should continue it, and I'd recomend looking into open office for free spell check.

This looks like a great story and don't worry the spelling and everything is fine :D keep up the good work

This story sucks! Your spelling stinks, you use poor grammar, there is no plot, and you seem to have total disregard for the English language! PLEASE for all that is sacred and holy... Never writer again. Perhaps, that was too harsh. First, use spell checker. It is an insult to a beta reader to have to fix the simplest mistakes that you as a writer should be able to fix yourself. Next, after having someone beta this story, be sure to check for any mistakes in grammar or mispellings that a beta reader might have missed. Maybe after doing all of that, you will become a better writer.

this is good write more plz

Hey great start. Never thought you would put him and Kyuubi together because he threatened to kill himself if Kyuubi doesn't let him control his body at all time. So Kyuubi and Naruto merged togehter or what. I have a few things that I would like to ask you if you would e-mail me and thanks for a great story....

nice story so far. o and hinata's fathers name is Hiashi

I liked this stry so far. though it did weird me out a lil at the end of the first chapter. @-@ the mental image is stuck....gack >< i must read yaoi to make it go away! Keep up the good work though! ^_^ *runs away to look for sanctuary (aka yaoi)*

not bad. I think that it wasn't too creative in the beginning, but you did good on how you found a very valid excuse to have Naruto move into the Hyuuga complex. I liked that. keep up the good work.

love the story hoping for more soon

yo love it write faster! Please : (