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for Hidden Heartache

by shiinechan

person JustAddWater
schedule December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
JAW: It's good, I really like stories that are in first person. It protrays feelings alot better. And Naruto is definitly feeling feelings. Your ANs metion one-sided GaaNaru, is that Naruto liking Gaara or Gaara liking Naruto? I never thought about that pairing before, I merely thought of the two as having a brotherly relationship. I like it! Great job!
Naruto: Superb!
Gaara: Nice
Sasuke: I want Naruto NOW!
Naruto: Not only was that scary, it was also OOC.
JAW: I suggest running very fast!
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
q.p buhuhuu... sniff... poor naru... update... sniff...
person Inui's Bastard Love Child
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoa. Cool. Me like.
I await the next installment with gusto.
person Inui's Bastard Love Child
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Gee. This is just getting better and better.
Keep up the great fic... ^___^
Plus will Gaara and Naruto get together?
person BadAss1
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
not bad keep at it
person Black Wolf
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love this story please continue because I want to know what Gaara's reaction is. Please update real soon.
person cibiboy
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update soon plez
person Kagaya
schedule December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oo...write more...please please.
schedule December 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awww, this is getting so sad...really great though.
person Marielle
schedule December 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a pretty good story. Great plot.


I just think you use "I" too much. Stop trying to explain the story, and just tell it...

But otherwise, you're doing a gerat job.