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October 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hey i saw that you needed a beta reader i could be one if you still need one and i'm actualt posting this on my second time reading the story and i usealy don't reread fanfics but this one was good so keep on writing and remember my proposistion about me being the beta reader if you need one still.
Ja Ne,
The Dark Sand Queen
Ja Ne,
The Dark Sand Queen
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October 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really love this story, its one of my favorites! I really hope hope you haven't given up on it, because it a great story and very well written.....
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October 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i have been waiting for this to continue so long ;__________;
this really is a great! love it... really love it so much... love the angst, love the mpreg. , love the pairing and first of all love the uke naruto!
i really hopet this will continue...
this really is a great! love it... really love it so much... love the angst, love the mpreg. , love the pairing and first of all love the uke naruto!
i really hopet this will continue...
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October 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
KYUU!! I love this story!
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I’m not sure if you can tell what chapters I’m reviewing, and that may have made some of my previous comments confusing, like the nesting one. Of the reviews I’ve left today, the first one was for chapter six, and the second review was for chapter eight.
(Chapter 8) I’m now sure that Sasuke remembers that they had sex after four weeks, when he says he has something to talk to Naruto about, after bringing the fainted (*snerk*) Naruto home. I think he must want to talk about how they slept together. And if I extend my brain a little more, I wonder if Sasuke had never forgotten. Right after Sasuke wakes up in the hospital, there is a point in their conversation where he lets Naruto determine what happens. Maybe that was just a way of letting Naruto deny or confirm that they slept together. Naruto chose not say anything, and Sasuke follows Naruto’s lead. At least until four weeks later when Sasuke tries to bring it up.
(Chapter 10) I don’t know if I’ve said it before, but I love the cliff hanger where Shikamaru discovers Naruto’s necklace. It’s so exciting!
(Chapter 11) This is my favorite chapter. I’ve reread this one over and over. Something about Naruto finally revealing himself to Shikamaru is incredibly interesting. It’s like Naruto’s submitting himself, but in a completely non-sexual way.
(Chapter 13) I love this line, “While Naruto’s decisions were impulsive, he swept people into his way of doing things. Usually I’m immune to his rash planning, but this time I was pulled in instead of getting him help.”
It’s just so true, and you phrased it more eloquently then other statements you’ve made in the past.
I also worry that Sasuke may not make a good father. He’s selfish and has the potential to be emotionally brutal. That’s not good for Naruto or the baby.
Unfortunately, I’m no good at naming babies. I’d be afraid anything I suggested was stupid. ^^;;
(Chapter 8) I’m now sure that Sasuke remembers that they had sex after four weeks, when he says he has something to talk to Naruto about, after bringing the fainted (*snerk*) Naruto home. I think he must want to talk about how they slept together. And if I extend my brain a little more, I wonder if Sasuke had never forgotten. Right after Sasuke wakes up in the hospital, there is a point in their conversation where he lets Naruto determine what happens. Maybe that was just a way of letting Naruto deny or confirm that they slept together. Naruto chose not say anything, and Sasuke follows Naruto’s lead. At least until four weeks later when Sasuke tries to bring it up.
(Chapter 10) I don’t know if I’ve said it before, but I love the cliff hanger where Shikamaru discovers Naruto’s necklace. It’s so exciting!
(Chapter 11) This is my favorite chapter. I’ve reread this one over and over. Something about Naruto finally revealing himself to Shikamaru is incredibly interesting. It’s like Naruto’s submitting himself, but in a completely non-sexual way.
(Chapter 13) I love this line, “While Naruto’s decisions were impulsive, he swept people into his way of doing things. Usually I’m immune to his rash planning, but this time I was pulled in instead of getting him help.”
It’s just so true, and you phrased it more eloquently then other statements you’ve made in the past.
I also worry that Sasuke may not make a good father. He’s selfish and has the potential to be emotionally brutal. That’s not good for Naruto or the baby.
Unfortunately, I’m no good at naming babies. I’d be afraid anything I suggested was stupid. ^^;;
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
please update i wanna know wat happens so please update i'll be your best friend and help you if you need ideas for stories i got lotsof them so pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaseeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee update.
Signed,
The Dar Sand Queen
Signed,
The Dar Sand Queen
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm going back and rereading the story. I forgot how hot the lemons were! You explain where there limbs are, and that helps a lot with visualizing what's going on. It's actually pretty important to include and some authors forget to explain how the character's bodys are splayed. And something about the second lemon was touching. It made me feel like the characters really cared about each other, without getting corny.
There's two things I've been wondering. First is Itachi still alive? If he is and he finds out that an Uchiha heir has been born, will he care? Second, why did Sasuke not remember, or deny remembering, that he and Naruto had sex? Rereading this chapter I hoped to figure out a little of what he was thinking, but his thoughts were still completely hidden from me. I can't even tell if he had sexual thoughts towards Naruto before the two slept together, or if Naruto kissing him was the first time the idea had ever occured to him. None the less, it was obvious from the start that he cared about Naruto and saw him as his most important person.
There's two things I've been wondering. First is Itachi still alive? If he is and he finds out that an Uchiha heir has been born, will he care? Second, why did Sasuke not remember, or deny remembering, that he and Naruto had sex? Rereading this chapter I hoped to figure out a little of what he was thinking, but his thoughts were still completely hidden from me. I can't even tell if he had sexual thoughts towards Naruto before the two slept together, or if Naruto kissing him was the first time the idea had ever occured to him. None the less, it was obvious from the start that he cared about Naruto and saw him as his most important person.
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Naruto is nesting! Aw, that's too cute! <3
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October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great, fantastic. Loved Sasuke in this chapter. I only have one name suggestion, which is kiseki, which means miracle, I think. Anyway, hope to read more soon.
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October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Did you forget us? Please update *cries*