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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
smex smex smex! hot amazing wooot 1*(^!*^$#$#@@ my brain has stopped functioning smex!
hope you write more. its amazing!
hope you write more. its amazing!
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December 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Haha great one-shot
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow is all I can say. I am left speachless after such an awesome story. That was great and if you decide to do a second part to it I will be there to read it. great work.
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! This is majorly hot! *shivers* I do really wanna see a sequel to this story. Great writing!
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Excuse me as I die from the hotness of it all. You should definitely add a second chapter.
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
damn that was hot! *fans self* this story is awesome and I hope you'll continue it! this one good lemon!
"His hormones, however, were demanding little suckers that required a sacrifice." that's my favorite line! damnit so seksy! poor naruto is teh sacrifice though we all know he loves it! <3 well I hope you'll continue this cuz this is one of the best sasu/naru lemons out there and the fans love it! don't ever stop being so sex-saw! ^_^
-xtaintedrelfection
"His hormones, however, were demanding little suckers that required a sacrifice." that's my favorite line! damnit so seksy! poor naruto is teh sacrifice though we all know he loves it! <3 well I hope you'll continue this cuz this is one of the best sasu/naru lemons out there and the fans love it! don't ever stop being so sex-saw! ^_^
-xtaintedrelfection
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
omg THIS WAS A GOOD STORY YOU SHOULD RIGHT A NOTHER PART TO IT. go you!
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was awesome. It was nicely paced, very descriptive and detailed. I loved it keep up the great work and I can't wait to see what else you come up with. ^_^
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was hawt! that had to be the best sasunaru one shot i've read all month. it was just perfect! the length, descriptions and sasuke's lack of self control. you SO have to make a sequel. *gives you the puppy-eyed-look-of-doom* please?
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well. I just had the read of my MONTH.. I *really* loved that!
Nice and long and real and satisfying as all get-out! Very IC.. gotta have IC.. ::mutters that for a while before snapping back to the topic at hand::
There *is* (though I *despise* mentioning it after such a good read!) a slight issue with some word-jumbling, nothing *too* major, but with ideas or tenses or.. well, I'm not sure how to specify it, really. I was supposing English isn't your native language.. am I right? I mean, this is *wonderful* as it stands, but with a Beta this would R0X teh S0X of teh SasuNaru Fandom! ::pets her poor, poor NaruSasu Fandom, but really, will take her Naruto-loves-Sasuke-loves-Naruto any way she can get it::
Nothing meant negatively at *all* here, that Story was pure, unadulterated LOVE!!
Aaaand I love love! ::silly grin::
Oh, *please* keep sharing with us!
- DeeDubya
Nice and long and real and satisfying as all get-out! Very IC.. gotta have IC.. ::mutters that for a while before snapping back to the topic at hand::
There *is* (though I *despise* mentioning it after such a good read!) a slight issue with some word-jumbling, nothing *too* major, but with ideas or tenses or.. well, I'm not sure how to specify it, really. I was supposing English isn't your native language.. am I right? I mean, this is *wonderful* as it stands, but with a Beta this would R0X teh S0X of teh SasuNaru Fandom! ::pets her poor, poor NaruSasu Fandom, but really, will take her Naruto-loves-Sasuke-loves-Naruto any way she can get it::
Nothing meant negatively at *all* here, that Story was pure, unadulterated LOVE!!
Aaaand I love love! ::silly grin::
Oh, *please* keep sharing with us!
- DeeDubya