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Well,she died.Good for you.I liked her doing Itachi,he through her back pretty fast.I like your descriptions of the oral especially the lips bit.The screwing sounded devine.More iffy was the instant lust but thats it.Cheers.

Hi. I'm a huge fan of Itachi. I know this is your first hentai fanfic and it is obvious that you have read alot of lemon fan fics. To me there was no originality. It is the same basic lemon concept that often people use here. I have seen over fics use the same description when describing sex. It also put me off alittle that Itachi acutally look for permission before he entered her. I just don't think he would do that. It's like they made love like two lovers and then he killed her. It just don't seem right but others might like it. Also there were some grammer problems too. Goodluck with future fics.