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March 26, 2013 at 12:00 AM
I'm so happy Neji didn't get shot and Sasuke didn't die. Sasuke just wanted to be loved. That was a great backstory for Sasuke's actions.
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June 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow, I loved this story!
And the ending was so sweet! XD
And the ending was so sweet! XD
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December 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Now that was a VERY cute story. I got so teary eyed when I read about Sasuke's past and how he was willing to let Neji have Naruto for Naruto's own happiness. ^ ^ Very cute story!
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December 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ohh! I like this story! It is so beautiful(if you know what I mean) ^_^ I am so happy that Sasuke is alright and super happer when Naruto is no longer crying when he confess his love. But poor Neji~ anyway, there will always be a somone special for him!
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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Interesting concept, but I have a few pointers:
1. Don't refer to a guy's dick as a 'private'. It only demeans the body part, and the intelligence of the reader.
2. Work on your grammar.
3. Don't put such large spaces between paragraphs.
4. Proof read your work. Don't allow for any spelling errors.
Finally, if you're not sure about your story, get a beta or proof reader to check it over for you.
Have fun.
1. Don't refer to a guy's dick as a 'private'. It only demeans the body part, and the intelligence of the reader.
2. Work on your grammar.
3. Don't put such large spaces between paragraphs.
4. Proof read your work. Don't allow for any spelling errors.
Finally, if you're not sure about your story, get a beta or proof reader to check it over for you.
Have fun.
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January 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Wonerful plot, one of the best Naruto fiction plot I have ever read! The writing's also great, I totally love the story! Pleaseeeeeeeee, write a sequel! I would love you sooooooooooo much for that!
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done, very cute, sweet. I liked it. Chapters my dear! I think it was far too long to be a one-shot. Two or three chapters maybe? Excellent job ^^
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very excellent fanfic! :D I like how the way Sasuke and Neji's attention for Naruto is balanced and all... kyaa... >.< I'm too sleepy. MAybe I'll just submit a better ranting next time.... >__<
Keep up the good work! ^___^
Keep up the good work! ^___^
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
>o< How cu~te *cries* ..In the end, it all works out! *Points at Kishimoto* This is how it should be, you closet yaoi lover!!! XD
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
uh i didn't read the whole thing (only the begining really) but i'd suggest you use the word "private" less and make naruto less... i dunno, un-naruto like. still don't feel bad or anything, just practice? i dunno, i can't write for anything... maybe food.