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well i'm glad you kept going!! yay!! well.. now when's the nxt chapter comin out??!!

Although I'm not a SaiSake supporter or tattoo lover, this is really interesting. But I don't understand why Sai had to put condoms on the vibrators. I guess it's my lack of knowledge on BDSM and masturbating, poor ol' me. ^^;

wow love it. the fact thats its alot from sakura's pov only adds to the tension, the whole 'her once flawless skin' was wonderful, showing how sakura is rebeling and at the same time doesn't want to and i love that. it was one of the first things i thought of when i read this story. "wasn't that one of the thngs she treasured about herself? her flawless skin.?" i love the fact that you went into detail over the art and how it flowed over her body, not your regular fic, as you said. love the fact that your painting a picture with the art, its really great. and love how you described the interaction between sai and sakura when he was holding her down, it was ...moving in a weird freaky way.

although i do have to say i saw a few mistakes in grammer and stuff, which is very rare for you. mostly like you didn't proff read well enough of something.

i really like the whole artsy, artist theme of this story, the details of the tattoo and how the positioned her for the skecth was wonderful.

Some criticism before praise: 1) Author's notes within the story are distracting. People don't want a running commentary of your thoughts while they're reading the story--keep them before and after your chapters. If you feel something needs to be justified, stick it in an author note after the chapter is finished. 2) If you don't think something is spelled right, use the spell checking tool in your word processing program--it's bad enough that you don't use a spellchecker or proofread, but then to draw even more attention to it by asking your readers whether it's spelled right is worse. At best, it's distracting, and at worst, it will turn people away from reading your story. These two things are huge turn-offs for people, and the only reason I continued to read your story was because it was an interesting concept.

That being said, apart from some punctuation/capitalization issues, you have an interesting thing going on here, and your characterization of Sai is interesting as well.

Hmm... just re-read the first chapter, and I realized that Sakura's bikini had boy-cut shorts: those aren't the same as the side-tie bottoms she had in chapter two. Boy-cut shorts are like the short spandex shorts she's wearing in the manga now: they're slipped on from the feet.

hmmm well id just like to say that the (sp?) which i have also explained at the end of the piece
was a reminder to MYSELF to check that spelling since my WordP didnt recorgnize it
im just sorry i forgot to take it out

ive never really had a problem with quick notes in the middle of a fic
and i have read ALOT of fics

but i'll put them at the end anyways


im just glad you decided to give it a chance

jennjenner: yeeeea but im bored and tired and i need to read the latest chapter of ultimate uke syndrome
so im gunna skip more editing for the next couple days

well i dont have a beta and well i have rarely needed one so far so this is how my editing process goes

write the story
do one edit
post
edit again

a week later (maybe?) edit once more

i find i edit much better when i can actually read how it is posted...dunno why

OMG that was kinky! I frickin loved it, and now I demand more! Please update soon, the tattoo kink is great! I think I've fallen for Sai/Sakura.

Oh my GOD! I love you! This is so great I can't even describe it! Anyway, love it... um... yay for you!!

Absolutely love this fic! ^__^ Keep it up we love it!

yes i love it, but then again i love how you write. it seems so real. and i love the sai/saku thing. very good, like the idea. how will the others react? he he love it please continue.