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for Fish Food

by ClosetSemeHinata

schedule June 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hmm...I'll stick around...cupcakes for you!
person oohshiny
schedule October 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WAGH NOW I NEED T KNOW TH END!!! could you email me when you update? ='( im at deannathx@comcast.net
person Hitomi No Ryu
schedule February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like this fic...I really do.

However...can you not make the fic shown as one HUGE paragraph!?

This not only does this destorys the reader's eyes, it also gives a bad first impression about the story. And that's all it can take for a reader to ignore you right off the bat!!

UPDATE SOON...WITH A NEW LINE FOR EVERY CHANGES BETWEEN SCENE AS WELL AS DIALOGUE!
person Inuzuka
schedule February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Erm. I think this should've stayed as a crack-fic one-shot...
person kuro
schedule February 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. I definately like the second chapter better than the first but I suppose there's less mean sex in there so that's probably why. Man, I hope Naruto gets saved soon; it's horrible to think his mind is completely gone... Well anyway, it's definately getting interesting so keep up the good work!
person Pic's Pixie
schedule January 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omg! that was hot! lol please update this, it has great potential for more chapters, you know...they bring him back to their hideout, more bondage, more torture, maybe a dungeon muahahaha sorry my evil fangirl self is showing :P yeah great story luvs it, please update please :D