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nooooo!
keep writting, babe
your stories are so good!

yea i want to know what the hell is going on oh and i really like the story please update

Wow, please do continue this story. The premise is quite interesting, and I do so desperately want to know what happens to the boys! Your writing style brings the entire story to life.

dude... you so need to work on this... please?

I like the story...it's pretty OOC, and probably would work better as an original, but the premise of it is interesting, and the writing is well done.

I'd like to see you continue it.

Me like a lot !!!!! lol... GO YOU !!!!!! I think you should keep it going... but you know it's up to you !!!!!! Just wanted to say i love it !!!!!!

don't end there. Things are just getting started :)

Very intruiging and well written... please, do continue!

I really, really like the idea that you have here. This is a plot that I don't think I've ever seen before, and I like that for once Sasuke is the one being used, instead of the other way around. You do, however, have a few mistakes. The only really big one was a complete overuse of the term "blond". It's good to use it occasionally to break up the use of Naruto's name and common pronouns like "he", but you even used it more than once in the same sentence, and several times in the same paragraph, which is redundant and even worse than repeatedly using "he." You have a great start here, but your work would improve even more with a good beta. If you can't find one, e-mail me and I'll be happy to fill in until you can. Good work, and I'll look forward to an update!

Whaaa! Don't get rid of this! It's amazing! Please, please don't drop it! I'm in love with it already! Update, please?!