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by Inuzuka

person losthimagain
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Soooooooooo cool ^^ !!!!!!!!!!! Want more!!!!!!!!!!!! NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

-The Update Monster
person chimerical
schedule January 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ooo! Fighting! I can't wait to see how Naruto has progressed... and Sasuke and Sai need to try to outdo one another. Bad boy rivalry!

Very good so far.
person Zane
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!! *points accusing finger* HOW COULD YOU!!!!? THEY WERE SO CLOSE!!!!!!!!!! *huddles in a corner and cries* WAI!!!! YOUR SO MEAN!!!!!!! *jumps into the story and kills the ANBU person* DIE!!!!! *then turns to Sasuke and Naruto* You didn't see anything *then jumps out of the story and into the night laughing like a crazy woman* Can't wait till your update!!!


Your friend, Zane.
person spikemyangel
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i like the fic so far, & i'm 1/2 through with chapter 2, but i had to stop, because omfg, you say "noone" SO many times!!!!!! it's not a word!! for the love of fanfic, separate them! no one. see, not hard. I often have the urge to smush words together, but on cases like this where it is horribly horribly wrong & inaccurate, resist that urge. kinda like 'alot' - not a word. 'noone'...so painful....can you not see how awful that is? i'm cringing right now. but other than that, yay you!
person HydeCrazy
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*narrows eyes* why you...*shaking fists* TEME!!! it was sooooooooooooooooo mean to stop it there PLUS ruin their kiss!!! who can resist a wet Sasuke?!! WHO?!?!! the Anbu that got in the way should die!

And yeah...you are a bastard *grins sheepishly*
person SplitPersona
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yeah! Sai! You're right that they're really not that much alike, but with the whole black hair, black eyes, somewhat feminine features (not much though) AND the way they love to piss off Naruto... They do have quite a BIT in common.

Naruto and Sasuke are so gay. There have been hints upon HINTS throughout the manga AND the anime. The KISS, Ops 5/6, how they act around each other, Naruto's need to get Sasuke back, and he said that Sasuke was better looking than Sai. The translation for CH 291 came out yesteday and Naruto blows up with Kyuubi!chakra in Orochimaru's face, saying, "HE'S NOT YOURS! NEVER IN MY PRESENCE SPEAK AS IF SASUKE BELONGS TO YOU!" Yeah, possessive Naruto, definitely.

Plot production is good. Kakashi shows up and Naruto forces him to leave so that he doesn't bother/upset Sasuke. Like he wants someone to scare Sasuke away again. I like how they are starting to act like they used to around each other, falling back into the familiarity, but their thoughts are so different that they can't help but feel awkward. It's 'cute'. And yes, Sai does have a strange fixation on Naruto's penis. Sasuke might have to cut off some hands. How will they have Sasuke show off how much he has improved, will they make him fight someone? Don't worry, I think this chapter came out well, because even wih the lack off the sterotypical things that we love, no story would survive without chapters like these to push it along. And when it does come down to 'sex', how will they handle it? Both of them obviously have had traumatic experiences with this, so how will they be able to feel comfortable around each other to get to it. Or will it just HAPPEN and the fall out come after?
person DragonDame57
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
omgsh.. this is the first sai and sasuke encounter i've read.. AND IT'S INCREDIBLE! i hope it happens again... and i want to see jealous sasuke ^^

update soon! i like it~
person claire
schedule January 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YOu should add in MOre of Sai-kun in it hahhaha! just to make Sasu-chan jealous XD, btw it is called "JOUNIN" not jonin just to let u know
person Billy
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Hey!
Love the story!!!
I think that one has to be uke at some point.
They can switch off but whatever fits the mood makes the seme and the uke...
Continue lots and lots.!!! ^-^
person losthimagain
schedule January 24, 2006 at 12:00 AM
That was nice and I can't wait to see what happends!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^^

-The Update Monster