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For someone who's first language isn't english you do amazingly well. A lot better than some people who's first language is english. I'd offer to beta your story but I'm already doing it for three other people and between my classes and other things I have to do I'm a bit slow. But yea I loved your story, though I wonderd about one thing. You had Naruto getting really really upset, but the kyuubi didn't take over any? So I was kind of curious how much of the manga that you've read, if you read the manga at all. I don't want to say anything because I might give something away that you don't know yet. But yea I definitely love it. I told another author that I'd started to lose faith in the genre because I wasn't finding any good stories that are being updated but between the two of you, you are restoring my faith. So I hope to see an update for this story soon:)

Whoa! It's so very good! Very dark, very intense in emotions. You must have cracked your skull writing such a long and good chapter with such a constructive plot.

And for someone which mother tongue is not english and who don't have a beta-reader and who write such a long chapter, your sure didn't make mistakes (well, not that I've seen at least, again, english is not my mother tongue either).

I don't hate Sakura either, just the fact that she's so obssessed with Sasuke, like there is nothing else in her life, it make her kinda empty, what are her goals other than to have Sasuke,hum?

I wonder what happened to Orochimaru, if the seals on her arms didn't kill him, where is he??? I think they just placed Sasuke's soul in the place of Orochimaru's as the dominating one, but I might be wrong. Well, now at least Sasuke is kinda free, even if it won't be easy to him from now on.

I seriously do hope it's a SasuNaru (as in Sasuke is seme/top while Naruto is uke/bottom) as you put it and not a mistake from your part. I so hate it when such a good story finish in "ha, you thought so? sorry" cause I can't stomach the idea of Sasuke being bottom, it make me want to puke, but I can stomach to some level SasuNaruSasu. That doesn't seem important, especially in your plot, but I wanted to make sure before I read more and really began to fall in love with your story.

Well, good luck! Keep the wonderful work! Ja ne!

I personally think this is a very well written fic. Its been so long since i have read a fic that acutally has structer to it along with a developing plot! i can't wait to read more! ^^

hi i haven't read the story yet cause i just wanted to know will they end up togather and alive togather
and not heart beting togather but stel can have sex togather cause its oky if they end up with no heart bets
and stel can have sex :)
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