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October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very well written. You are a talented author. Major kudos to you, keep up the good work!
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June 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
what was that.! Hey has any one else wondered why the author puts that warning that says this mentions shonenai which encouners boy and boy relationspips. We know that how else would we find the stories.x.x That story was good but how could you do that to my NARUTO you b!@#~
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May 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good. I'm not much for non-con, but this was so well written that I was drawn in, and I couldn't stop reading. It was just...wow. I can't think of anything else to say.
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May 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
very nice. i always enjoy rape scenes, but your's was particularly great.
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April 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I was the one that requested this on Aarinfantasy. Hey, Death. Thanks again for writing the story. You are the best ^_^
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April 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
For a non-con PWP that was pretty enjoyable. It was very realistic, with Naruto feeling pain along with the pleasure, since I'm guessing that it's his first time, unlike many PWP where everything's pure pleasure and flowery words. The sense of realism makes your story very coherent and I like the length of the story. I also liked the small glimpse of what Naruto likes to do in his free time and his stand on the situation.
I found a couple of grammar mistakes here and there, so I suggest getting a beta, and I would gladly point out the mistakes for you but I'm kinda busy at the moment, sorry. D: The mistakes weren't so balantly obvious that it outright makes reading hard so it's nothing to worry about. Other than that, it was very awesome and pretty hot. It would be cool if you make sequels to this, or prequels. Can't wait for your next fanfic. ;)
I found a couple of grammar mistakes here and there, so I suggest getting a beta, and I would gladly point out the mistakes for you but I'm kinda busy at the moment, sorry. D: The mistakes weren't so balantly obvious that it outright makes reading hard so it's nothing to worry about. Other than that, it was very awesome and pretty hot. It would be cool if you make sequels to this, or prequels. Can't wait for your next fanfic. ;)
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April 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG! this fic was so damn good!!!!!!!!!!!!!! At first i thought it was a little shakey, but it was so full of angst and just pure yaoiness!!!!! You should definitly make more chapters!!!!
P.S.: Not to sound rude or anything but the song at the top of the story is called "Slept So Long" and it's not by Korn, it's by Jay Gordon of Orgy....just thought you should know
P.S.: Not to sound rude or anything but the song at the top of the story is called "Slept So Long" and it's not by Korn, it's by Jay Gordon of Orgy....just thought you should know
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April 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked it.... A littel dark and freaky, is it only a one-shot... you could do more chapters. If you do i look forward to seeing them.