rate_review Reviews

great sorry. love the coupling. I have always liked Temari/Naruto stories. I just finished reading everything to date and I have to admit i am a little pissed that the story is not complete but I am hoping you as the writer do not stop like so many others on this site (including myself) have when they are writing a truly interesting and addicting story (not that my story was any good or even in this category of fiction). Keep up the good work looking forward to the rest especially the contradiction that if what Kakashi read in the book was true if i am remembering this correctly then the baby Temari is carrying should be gone after the the White Chakra awoke in Temari. Unless it was what the Nine-tails claimed he did while Naruto initially healed her that countered the effect. Just a rambling thought that has been nagging at me. Looking forward to the chapter hope it is posted soon ( i am already feeling withdraw having finished reading the the current point). Keep it up I smell fanfic pulitzer.

Good grief, what a mess.

You know, for supposedly intelligent people and top class shinobi, they're all doing a damn fine job of ignoring their instincts.

the 9 sound ominous. I'm guess tsunade doesn't know about them and their breeding program... Still, if they wanted him wed and breeding, shouldn't they NOT be antaganizing him... and do they know about why Jewel up and vanished? if they have a hint they should know he wasn't going to be receptive yeah? If they din know, why din they. She was one of them right? Though i get the feeling the whole white miko thing wasn't in the game plan.

ty for the update, btw.

Great read I normally just lurk and don't bother reviewing but this story was actually so well written that I felt compelled. Honestly this is probably the best fanfiction I've read an unlikely pairing, several plot twists, I couldn't stop reading. I can only hope that the story gets finished eventually.

I hope ur planning on updating soon, been checking back for months now without any sign of life, i got absolutely addicted to this story when i found it and read it as fast as possible, plzzz dont wait much longer to update as im near that point, like i bet many others are, where im forgetting the previous chapters events after so long and its a bit too long to re-read again just for a refresher lol, waiting patientely, ur humble fan.

please update it in the near future..im waiting for it to progress.. :)

After a long while I checked this story again, and a new chapter!! I hope you have time to update because this complex plot is starting to come together!

OMG - most epic book ever even if its not done yet! i just spent the last 22Hrs reading it from beginning to end. and i have to say that i have never been so drawn into a story in years. I think I felt every range of emotion from out rage at the kyubbi's fan girls to absolute tears at the loneliness and sadness facing naruto with the loss of his son. the white chakra twist was brilliant and the fear in, of, and for kakashi is almost to the point where i felt like it was going to overpower my heart and id just break down into panic (love that guy), the love that has been slowly growing between naruto and temari is just so beautiful i cant even start to describe how it makes me feel. its almost as if it started to fill a void in my heart i didn't even know i had. i cant wait to see how kakashi either recovers or passes on but it seems with every new turn of events the two love birds who try and ignore there own love and needs are continually getting closer and i just cant wait to see how it all turns out i can just feel greatness seeping out of the pages. who or what ever your muse is is a god send because this is truly EPIC. praise be to the writer and any and all musing aids that be i will be checking back i think daily to see if another chapter of this great story because i desperately want to know how it unfolds and ultimately ends.

your ever appreciative and god smacked reader

Duze

"I'm not an old women like you"

And just how old ARE you? I seriously doubt I'm much older, but with your "outstanding" grasp of the English language I'm starting to doubt you made it past third grade. How is that even a legitimate excuse?

And you don't HAVE to MEET a female ninja to know they're supposed to be able to stand on their own two feet after a crisis. It's what they're TRAINED for. If a chick crumbles under pressure or mental stress than she's not much of a ninja. I always admired Temari for being so objective and non-nonchalant about everything, much unlike the rest of the female cast. Compared to Sakura, Hinata, or Ino she definitely stands out. (Not insulting any of them, just pointing out they're more emotional)

I'm not insulting the author. This is a very well-written work and I think she's doing her best with the plot and characters involved, but I DO criticize her choice in characters for a plot like this.

Fair enough. atleast note that ur critisim is for constructive purposes. im 20. nd male ;) ejoyed the splash but ill catch ya later

I've been reading this for a few years now, since before I've had an account, and I can honestly say that I'm confused. I can't tell if the author is just using this story as a thinly veiled soapbox for her own political beliefs or is making an honest attempt to write something decent about a controversial subject.

One thing I'd like to point out though, is that this plot would have gone along much, MUCH smoother with a female character OTHER than Temari, because while everyone has different interpretations of certain characters, it is COMPLETELY and UTTERLY out of character for Temari to keep a rape baby. She's been pinned as the "fuck it all" matriarchal badass. She was raised in "Old Sunagakure" where it was nearly as bad as Mist, and training nowithstanding, it's just so out of character for her to treat something like an unplanned pregnancy in such an emotional, subjective manner that it's almost painful to read.

I liked this at first, I really did. But what this fiction really did was rape Temari's character.

Love, a loyal Temari fan.