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Wonderful chapter..i liked it the most so far keep up the good work.

Yo yo I'm baaaaack and loving your updates. Jewel explanation is excellent. Temuto merger definitely on the horizon

being picky, you haven't changed your habit of spelling "tired" as "tiered" and your latest chapters had many instances of spelling "sand" as "sana". no doubt you were typing fast. Being the obsessed fan of this story I have every chapter edited gramatically and saved in word format if you want them.

*WAAA boo hoo**sniffles* im still wiping tears from my eyes that was so touching and im sorry i really feel like killing Jewel or is that what u were aiming for. well i have a few requests and other stuff so this is not going to be as short as my other reviews.

1. WHEN R THEY GOIN TO KISS ?!?!? I WANT THEM TO KISSSSSS <3
2. WHEN R THE PPL WHO VIOLATED Tem GOING TO PAY!! THEY HAVE TO PAYYYY!!!!!! ( or did u cover this in another chap. if u did just ignore this one *rubs back of head*)
3. When Tem has the baby u should have her be late and then they try many of the tecniques to induce labor and then they actulay have to have sex. Just a sugestion.
4. i want naruto to find his son at aa small village on the leaf countrys border. it would be such a happy moment and naruto would finally be lifted of his guilt.



P.S pls e-mail me when u have the new chap up and i would love ur help on an idea i have 4 a fic
tnks love ur story dont ever stop Love YA FireKitty

2. WHEN R THE BASTARDS WHO VIOLATED Tem GOIN TO PAY !!! I WANT THEM TO PAY!!!!!!(if u covered this in another chap.Ignore this *rubs back of head8)
3. When tem is due have be late and then her and naruto ty a whole bunch of remedies to induce labor but they have to eventully have to have sex. It would be an aquard way they could have sex and it would be very sweet too
4. Naruto should find his son in a small village on the border of the leaf country it would be a great moment and it would lift a great guilt off his shoulders


P.S. pls e-mail me when u have a new Chap. up and i would like to e-mail u some info on some fanfics i have in the making
dont ever stop love your storys Love YA FireKitty

Excellent work. This is a very good story, plot-wise, and the dialogue doesn't sound stilted or unnatural, two definite plusses which set this above the vast majority of other works. However, your word choice is consistently incorrect. While not so thick as to corrupt the sentences they appear in, their existence nevertheless gives the impression that you are an unskilled writer (which, it seems, is contrary to fact) too careless and lazy to edit your writing, or to find a beta-reader to tend to the matter for you. All-in-all, however, I am happy to note that these traits have not prevented the success of this story. I eagerly await your return from Chicago, and the further updating of this fic.
Thank you, and I hope your trip goes well.

Oh, wow! I... Have no other words to explain my thoughts of this. It's really well written, and now I finally see Naruto's pain more clearly. I actually cried at the end of this, and let me tell you, I don't do that very often. I love this chapter, it's in depth, and heartfelt. Just amazing-no, not just amazing, it's more than that. Typo's aside, it's perfect! I can't wait for the next chapter. Literally, I can't, so hurry up and write it. Lol. If I could give you one suggestion though, it would be "Change absolutely nothing in your writing style." I couldn't do any better myself. And yes I write fanfics. ^-^ Please continue! Please?... Please?! I can't wait!

-Shadow

Great story! Gotta say, this story's the first with a Temari/Naruto pairing I've encountered and I wondered how it'd work out, considering the pairing is a bit rare. But you've pulled it off really well! The story has been a great read so far and I look forward to future chapters of it, whenever they come! :). Ganbatte kudasai! :).

Oh, and when will word reach the Sand that Temari's safe? After all, I can't imagine Temari holding off telling her family that she's safe much longer...

Yay, that was a good chapter and I didn't see the Jewel thing coming from a mile away, bravo!!!! Keep up the great work and update when you have time please.

that girl was a dirty whore and should have died after the child

Holy crap that was so sad. Poor Naruto. At least things r looking u for him now.