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You know it never ocurred to me that it wasn't written the way it was ment to be,however I also never knew I was reading a first draft, nope it didn't.I mean I don't need things spoon fed to me though the PWP fiend in me would be happier to know where I was before mid fuck but that's my problem.Do a rewrite for yourself if you want is my veiw.I mean let us read it naturally,gods, now I am second guessing myself.

Peaches, I've really enjoyed this story. I don't think there's really anything that wrong with it. I actually prefer styles like this to the wishy-washy stuff some people write. It's good to give indepth descriptions of some things and to make sure that if you're inside a character's mindspace that the thoughts while organized, still flow like they would for a real person, in that kinda groggy connected way that makes everything connect even when it doesn't seem to. Typos happen to everyone and there's really nothing wrong with them. The human mind doesn't even read entire words after awhile; it jsut picks up the important letters and forms the words as they should be.
In this story, Found You, I've enjoyed the flow of it and they way the characters think. It's been interesting and fun and I really do find the way that Sasuke and Kakashi are characterized refreshing and uniqu. it's also been a fun read and I hope that you will continue to write more chapters for it.

ok i went and over a period of time came back to this story and have read all the chapters up to date. i have to say that i agree with that reveiwer ( except on the funny part, i got the jokes.). this story was really hard to read at points and confusing in others. my problem was with the actions. at certain points you couldn't tell how they were doing what ever they were doing. the last chapter for example fried my brain because i pictured sasuke on the bottom before you threw in there through all the thought chaos that kakashi turned him on his back or.. watever >3 with all this confusion, i still read through it because it was generaly good. just messy. i did love kakashi's meeting with iruka in the store, it was very cute and it just, well... urks the shiz out of me when i have to reread paragraghs to find out what they're doing then reread the thought and ect. so in general i agree that the story could use some structure and i'm glad your putting it on hold and taking more time with it because at heart it's a great story... =3

I've always liked the complexity of your sentences. There are some run-ons and typos that can be fixed, but I generally see those as minor and not much of a problem.

I've also enjoyed the humor, but I do have a very morbid sense of humor. If some people aren't laughing...well, some of it just isn't meant to be funny to us, as you pointed out.

Of course, it is your story; and if you feel that you need to revise, go ahead and do so. I'm not exaggerating or sugarcoating when I say that this is my favorite KakashixSasuke story out there. Or my favorite Sasuke-centered story, for that matter. I hope you still plan to finish it?

Good luck,

NightsEnd

i liked ur story very much its totally awesome-i think that sasuke and Kakashi make a very cute couple-u should definitely keep adding chapters to this story i would very much appreciate it.

Okay, though it is true that some times parts of the story can get a tad confusing, not all of us are perfect. We all make mistakes and we all know we make them. I know that I never use a beta and I barely ever read over my fics, so don't worry about that. I don't use a beta because most of the people I know read my fic and I don't want it to be spoilt for them because they're looking out for grammer and spelling mistakes.

You can make the humor funny when it's supposed to be and that's good. But you're right, it doesn't always have to be funny to us.

Your story has flow, and some of your paragraphs are beautifully written adn that's what I love about this story. You really develop your characters and we always know how they're feeling and what they're thinking.

You're doing a great job and I can't wait until the editing is finished. Sometimes I want to go back and fix things in my stories, but I always hesitate to because it was how I wrote them originally.

You handled that flame very well, I applaud you. :D It is quite sad that this is the longest review I've ever given you. I should work on that.

Till then, keep it up!

DevilLived

I actually had to read this twice to actually get it ^^; cos you write sex so ... poetical i guess XD; Hehe Awesome chapter tho ^^ I'ma so happy <3 Poor Kakashi has such a bad inner turmoil Oo;; perverting over his student an all =P and Sasuke...-_- He needs to get over this avenger this...its annoying and emo XD;

I cant wait to read more ^^

Liah xx

"The hand at his cheek took a possessive, relieved hold on the back of the thin neck, steadying the trembling boy with the heartbeat he had barely managed to keep in control." That line was one of my favorites...possessiveness wins. Very sweet, too. (thumbs up)

The lemon was great. That is one hell of a birthday present. And I love how Iruka has to guilt-trip Kakashi during their conversations whereas Sasuke barely has to do anything at all. XD

Thanks for updating--I've been waiting. Good luck with the next chapter.

Loved it, so glad you updated. I like how you made Sasuke's training schedual, it's interesting. The lemon was hot, great job!

Anyways, can't wait till the next chapter so update soon!

Amazing, as always. I'm so glad I finally caught up with this story.

"He was taking his Top Rookie back." Ah, man. It's lines like those that keep me coming back for new chapters. You're too good at this.

I'll be here when you update again. You win. At everything. :-)

-NightsEnd