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October 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I LIKE your story but some stuff just was not realistic at all like the fact it was his first time and they used no lube and it didnt hurt for long trust me it hurts for the next few day even when u use lube and not just the first time ethere that was all i had to complain about i just like to read fics that have thing the way they should be not what we wish they were BUT I LOVE THE STORY
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November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
WHOOT!!!! I'm not usually a huge fan of this pairing but it caught my attention! I luv it! I'm not done but what I've read is great! Sooooooo cute! I luv my bishies! I have also read something else from you. I like the way you think!
Naruto: whoot!... hey wait ... kiba???
Sasuke: *jealous*
Poke (me): chill it's a fic..^^'
Sasuke: HE'S MINE NOT KIBA'S!!
Kiba: who what about me?
Poke: uh-oh! I'll save you Blue-san!(<= you)*takes naru chars away*
Poke: bye!
Naruto: whoot!... hey wait ... kiba???
Sasuke: *jealous*
Poke (me): chill it's a fic..^^'
Sasuke: HE'S MINE NOT KIBA'S!!
Kiba: who what about me?
Poke: uh-oh! I'll save you Blue-san!(<= you)*takes naru chars away*
Poke: bye!
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July 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
It's a Naru/Kiba pairing, that alone makes the story great for me ^^
Nonetheless there're two points you could, in my opinion, improve in. The first would be repetitions as with the word 'then' that you've been using a little often in some paragraphs. My second and last annotation is about a bit too detailed sections in our story like Naruto's and Kiba's breakfast in chapter one.
All in all it's still a wonderful fanfiction and I don't understand why there're no other reviews.
Nonetheless there're two points you could, in my opinion, improve in. The first would be repetitions as with the word 'then' that you've been using a little often in some paragraphs. My second and last annotation is about a bit too detailed sections in our story like Naruto's and Kiba's breakfast in chapter one.
All in all it's still a wonderful fanfiction and I don't understand why there're no other reviews.