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Wowz. How do you keep up with this? I like the kind of time uh wuddaya call it, rift/changeness happening. It's so great at building up suspense. And I don't know why you dislike this chapter. You accomplished lots of things. But SERIOUSLY, how's a girl supposed to finish the damn chapter when Sasuke's talking about his winger dinger? Honestly, I laughed for like five minutes, which sucked because before that I laughed for like 20 when all he would say was Hnn. And what Naruto was saying to goad him was HYSTERICAL. That could be the funniest thing I've ever read.

And then suddenly I wanted to write something that had to do with their kids. That was so cute! Their kids running around and then maybe dating each other? I so want to write something for that. But then I guess the way I always like things to happen, that would sort of be incest cuz somehow they'd be NaruSasu's kids. ANYWAY, so that was a riot, and also when he said Mr. Toilet. I love a funny Sasuke!

But poor Naruto! Then I was afraid Sasuke was making out with a dead body because HELLO, why was that whip thing in the bathroom? WHAT THE HELL. Mind exploding. Blind Sasuke, eh? Another interesting idea... you've got all kinds of plot bunnies hiding up in this chapter. Dammit, what did he give consent to? GYAH! too intense. hnn.

Kya~! Thanks for the update email (how thoughtful)! It was an interesting chapter and totally did not suck - how could you even THINK that? Sasuke's flashback thoughts in the shower really got to me *pain pain*, can't wait to find out the meaning behind the argument! Thanks for the update, it was a fabulous read =3

I can't wait for the next chapter, but take your time so it rocks! Man, I liked Saki, although I suppose she /had/ to be defeated so the story could continue, but I hope she didn't die. I'm curious now. How did Naruto and Sasuke managed not to be killed/captured when they were both unconscious. Wondering who Lulu and Stilmaya(?) are, and who the whip with glass shards belong to...the identical whip that hurt Naruto. *confused here* Hint hint. But I can't wait for another chapter. I like how the story is progressing and all the details. Nice expression of emotion too. XD Can't wait for an update!

Kayo

WOW! I was expecting a cute little Naru/Sasu, a romatic story, touching... other stuff. More cute and fluff... BUT THIS WAS AWSOME! SOOOOO SOOOOO SOOOOO MUCH BETTER! Wow, this complex story is just... just what I've been looking for! I thought it would be mostly/only about Naruto and Sasuke, but this! And the characters! They're great!!!!! Although I thought it was odd that Sakura didn't punch Naruto when he kissed her?! Does she warm up to him in the later episdoes <-----(at 190 right now and haven't seen any of that yet) hopefully not. i really am not a Sakura fan ::kills Sakura when no one is looking:: Hahaha, ::whistles as she's walking away:: Hey Hinata! What's up! Wanna go meet up with Naruto and me? yes, I'm more of a Hinata fan! She works hard and becomes awesome! But so about your story again, sorry I ramble! heheh, Its, although you've heard this a bunch of times I'm sure, great! I know how it is with school, and siblings... I only have two but its still a pain. I'm really bad at updating too ::hides from readers:: I'm sorry!!!! I'm sure you're better than me though, I haven't updated a story for like half a year or soemthing, lol. Anyway, please update soon! I would check everyday... but you sound like you might not be able to update in a while, so maybe every week? Then again, I really can't wait!!!!

Inus_Kagome_Forever

Hmm, odd, I had a lot more along with that review but it seems to have gotten erased? idk Anyway, just to make sure you understand what I was trying to say in the last one, it was mostly rambling anyway, heheh, get carried away, update soon!

Inus_Kagome_Forever

YES! You updated!

I really liked this chapter, even if you don't (though I know how that feels) and I'm glad that you're not going to give up on this any time soon, because it is a really great story and you write well.

Things are getting messy. What's Itachi's gang doing here?????

Poor Sasuke woke up naked. How embarassing.

Update soon, okay?

You need to pick a tense: past or present. Stop switching between the two. The same thing applies to the perspective. Either use second or third person pov, not both. You swithch from "Naruto does this" to "You do that" to "Naruto did this" etc. It's distracting and inconsistent. Other than that, looks promising. These are just little things that you need to work on. Good job.

Kya~ Sounds interesting ^^ Please update soon!

Nope, you're not the only one that's lost! I'm wondering what the hell's next! Could you please email me when this is updated, because this site, unfortunately, doesn't have an alert system like ff does. My email's sakura underscore laurel 6 6 6 at yahoo dot com. Thanks a bunch! Ja!

why havnt you updated. i really love this story. i want to know what happened to sasuke and naruto. so sad...and yet angst is so good. you are doing so well with this fan fic please dont put it on hiatus or just leave us stranded like this. i want to know whats going to happen to naruto and sasuke. so keep up the good work.