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April 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The only thing preventing this story from being COMPLETELY AWESOME is the fact that 90% of the dialogues are in Japanese. I really loved the story other than that. The depiction of the characters, the use of grammar, punctuation, etc. were all really good. Several steamy lemons and a very smexy Saucy. But, I have a feeling you are going to lose a lot of readers on the dialogues, you may want to do a second version that is completely English.
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April 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Dude that was totally hot *_* *drools*
This is a total compliment, this was the first fic my throat actually went dry reading it Oo Keep up the excellent work! ^_^
This is a total compliment, this was the first fic my throat actually went dry reading it Oo Keep up the excellent work! ^_^