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May 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Keep it coming. This is a fanastic ficce. I love the twist of Itachi being inncoent or is He? I think that you played it right though. Itachi may have hurt his brother mentally but never did he trully attack him. I can't wait to read more. Please keep it coming.
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April 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Kinda fluffy and OOC, but I like it. The twists and turns, and the admissions and changes all fit together pretty good. Please update soon!
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April 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The story is different but your dialogue'z are very amatuerish and just seems like they were writting by an 14 yr old mind...
It's not bad and i do and will look forward to your next chapters, but you need to work on the dialogue and characters..
Everything is way off!!
It's not bad and i do and will look forward to your next chapters, but you need to work on the dialogue and characters..
Everything is way off!!
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April 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow...just...wow. I thought this fic was gonna be the same old thing of Naruto getting a bloodline limit, he and sasuke falling in love, killing orachimaru together and then living happily ever after. I am SO glad it isn't one of those fics! Your story is so deep, and full of real human emotions. This was such an incredible story to read through, I started on chapter 1 and read all the way without stopping, and i'm completely amazed. That, and starving for a new chapter, lol.
I really can't say enough good things about this story. It just came up from behind and bit me in the ass, seriously. Naruto and Sasuke are so perfect together, you didn't rush the relationship or drag it along, and you made them falling in love make perfect sense. It wasn't weird or unlikely or anything. Your characterization is wonderful, and I love how you put Itachi in there, giving him a story and everything. I don't know about you, but personally, I don't think he killed his family. I loved reading the theory that was presented in your story.
I have to point something out....
"My old apartment was rented out and I don't want to live with the Hyuuga's. Way too crowded there.” Actually I'm worried they might try to steal my sperm or something even more horrible than that!"
LOL! I was laying down in bed and actually had to put my head in the pillow because I was laughing so hard. Very wonderfully written, and something Naruto would probably think.
Again, you've done an amazing job here! :)
I really can't say enough good things about this story. It just came up from behind and bit me in the ass, seriously. Naruto and Sasuke are so perfect together, you didn't rush the relationship or drag it along, and you made them falling in love make perfect sense. It wasn't weird or unlikely or anything. Your characterization is wonderful, and I love how you put Itachi in there, giving him a story and everything. I don't know about you, but personally, I don't think he killed his family. I loved reading the theory that was presented in your story.
I have to point something out....
"My old apartment was rented out and I don't want to live with the Hyuuga's. Way too crowded there.” Actually I'm worried they might try to steal my sperm or something even more horrible than that!"
LOL! I was laying down in bed and actually had to put my head in the pillow because I was laughing so hard. Very wonderfully written, and something Naruto would probably think.
Again, you've done an amazing job here! :)
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April 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This was a very interesting twist. One I have never seen before. Awesome job! Damn ffn still not working...