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OMG! So good!! This chapter made me really happy. It's weird though cuz it was sad...but It could have made me happier if Sasuke had finally said 'I love you' to Naruto! I hope he will soon, it always makes me have warm fuzzies in my tummy when he says 'I love you' to Naruto in a fic! Can't wait till then!!

That was a greta chapter, you really wrote it well. The scene with Naruto and Sasuke after the Hospital Nursary scene had me on the edge of my seat. I couldn't wait to see how you got Naruto to convince Sasuke, and I sure wasn't disappointed!! I loved how you didn't really make Sasuke say it, but it was still clear that he agreed at the same time. :D It was so...so.... (fangirl squeal) ...Yeah. It was like that.

I can't wait till the next update, and I also can't believe that this story is almost done! I won't ask if there's gonna be a sequel until the end because that usually gives you a clue.

Until the next chapter, have a nice day!

I'm gonna be shorter than usual because my brain is just not up to coming up with a long good review for you this time around. But I love this chapter and I am SOOOOOOOOO happy that Sasuke decided to have to surgery. I have to say I really felt for Neji in this chapter, it seems like he really loves Naruto and even though he's sort of moved on with Tenten he hasn't completely gotten over him. I hope he does, Neji's one of my favorite characters in the series and I like to see him happy. I can't wait to see the rest of the chaptes and the results of the surgery. And I had one question before I end this review, (and you might have already mentioned but I just can't remember at the moment) are you planning to write a sequel to this story or are these 10 chapters going to be it? And actually I have one more, are you planning/writing any stories that you're going to post eventually? I definitely want to see more of your writing, I love it and I'm finding it harder and harder to find author's that I truly love. That's all, I think I'm going to sleep now so good night.

I have to say you're a better person than me, I wouldn't have dignified that idiotic accusation with a response. And if I did respond it wouldn't have been nearly as polite as what you wrote. Oh well. On to the chapter, I loved it as usual. All your chapters are so long, it takes me awhile to read them because their so long I'm interupted really often in the middle. But unlike other stories where I've been interupted, I don't lose the groove of the story. You suck me into the story so well, I just love it. I have to say before this chapter I was thinking Naruto was a better person putting up with Sasuke, but after this one I'd say they're about even. Naruto can act really stupid at times. Though I have to say on him it's a bit cute. I have to say I'm wondering about Neji though, if he's going to talk to Sasuke and if he's going to help convince him to have the surgery. I still have no clue what's going to happen and I hate that a bit. I'm one of those people who always wants to know what's going on and I just can't figure out you're story. But I can't wait until your next update, especially since it's in the same day and I want to see Sasuke's reaction to either a visit from Neji or Naruto's two hour absence after a visit from Neji. On to more technical matters, I noticed a few spelling errors in the chapter. And because I'm a bit annoying, I'm going to correct two of the ones I noticed first:

"He’d be diluting himself if he didn’t admit he wasn’t as cool and collected about death as he pretended to be." should be deluding not diluting.
"The child that clang to life desperately and pathetically because he was horrified and weak." should be clung not clang.

Before I finish this review I wanted to ask one question, are you planning or contemplating a sequel or at the end of this will this be the end? Anyways that's all, I love your chapters, I love your story, and I can't wait until your next update.

This chapter was really well written, you did a very good job!

I liked the beginning with Sasuke's thoughts about the procedure and Naruto. It was sad that he never visited his family's graves or anything.

I liked the scene with Sasuke and Kakashi-you always make Kakashi sound so cool! XD He has some very smart lines, I think.

But my fav line so far has to be this one:

"The glass was always half full with Naruto."

I thought that was really, realllly cool!! :D:D It's such a smart way to describe someone like Naruto and I think that you're the first one that's done it like that.

Anyways, I can't wait until the next chapter. I kinda get what the Ino and Choji part had to do with Sasuke and Naruto but maybe I still have to look underneath the underneath :D.

Update soon, alright?

i really do like this chapter, it was touching the part when naruto helped sasuke to the bathroom, the ending was wonderful and i can't wait to read more

i really do like this chapter, it was touching the part when naruto helped sasuke to the bathroom, the ending was wonderful and i can't wait to read more

WOW!! You have got to be one of the few writers that I have read from that can keep Sasuke and Naruto in character for that long. This fic has me on the end of my seat with all the falshbacks and emotional stress that you have the characters go through. This is also one of the few fics that I read that does not have very many grammatical errors, if any. I really do hope that you update soon. I also love that your chapters are long, that always gets me hooked onto stories.

That was....heartbreaking. I've never read a story that touched me that deeply, much less a single chapter...i'm still in a bit of shock. I had to stop reading a few times, and let me tell you, I went through a good amount of kleenex over here. Not only the situation they're in, but the way you've written them, your style of writing, it's just so emotionally strong. You know, once Sasuke said "Dobe-kun" in the latest chapter, "Breaking", I almost stopped reading this story all together. It sounds silly, but at that point, it just became way too depressing. But that bitter-sweet heartwarming part at the end of the chapter was just enough to keep an over-emotional girl like myself in for the long run. I've seen drama, and I've seen angst, but you've gone and taken all of it to the next level with your amazing writing ability.


It's with puffy eyes that I await the next chapter, and cross my fingers and toes for a happy ending.


- Mimi

Hi There... I love your story and plot but... there's something nagging on my mind.... There are several situations in your story that... I'm seriously risking it but.... It looks like you COPIED, and I mean LITERALLY COPIED from other fanfics. For example: in chapter 4, the picnic scene... When I started reading I thought "Hey... It looks like that other fanfic I read.... And in the end they got shirts from Sakura" AND THEY DID IN YOUR FANFIC!!!! And about Sasuke's leaving too. You mentioned it earlier that Naruto could only trail Sasuke because his Kage Bushin woke him up. That's new, I had never read but... The tea!!! It has already been used and particularly I remember the green tea detail because I too love every kind of tea EXCEPT green tea (like Naruto) and Naruto using one of his Kage Bushin to drink the tea and you used that in your fanfic... And there are more of these situations, more in the first chapters than the last ones.
I hope this review does not leave you upset (DUH I'm accusing you of COPING other fanfiction, of course it'll leave you upset!!!) but.... Maybe you were the author of the other fics I'm talking about and you decided to interline these situations? But I've seen your author profile and this is your only fanfic.
Please, tell me if I'm wrong!! I think I'm doing a very serious accusation but it's just weird. And please continue with your fic, don't give up the main plot, it's really interesting.

PS: I left my mail so you can contact me or i'll go to the review site in a few days to see your answer. I'm also on aff but my fics got deleted ;_; I'm on the same name.