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(oh, my God. I wrote a whole long review and I go to post it and it "cannot find the server" AGH!!)

That was a very emotional chapter, but you strung it together nicely. Be proud, be very proud. :D

Trying to remember what I wrote before.... I like how you made Naruto and Sasuke's relationship not all that normal, almost awkward. It's realistic because they really are rivals and Sasuke really is an ass some times. If you get what I'm trying to say...

It looks like Naruto has made some progress with Sasuke... But he better pick up the pace! He only has one day left, right?! He IS going to convince the Uchiha.... I hope...

Part with the bedpan was precious. I enjoyed that.

Anyways, sorry if this review is a bit choppy :D. Just update soon, alright?

I LOVE YOUR STORY SO MUCH!!!! Every chapter just gets better and better. And they're so long, which is always nice. I have to say about your story, it's not predictable. A lot of similar stories are leading towards a predictable conclusion so you spend the whole story just waiting for the obvious conclusion. I think most of us reading the story know what we hope will happen but none of us have any clue as to what will actually happen. And that's something that makes the story even better, a lot of the time predictability can ruin a story. Though of course, I'm hoping you'll go for the happy ending because Sasuke dying is so sad. Though the story is pretty sad, despite not knowing what's going to happen. Like the scene at the end with the bedpan. I'm glad you added that in, it's like Naruto saw a bit of the reality of the situation and how.....dependent.......not in control Sasuke was in the hospital. And why he's afraid of what might come after if he had the surgery. AHHHH!!!!! It's just so good, I can't say enough things about your story. And now I'm going to go because I have to vote for Taylor so McBanshee doesn't win AI.

Wow, Kaguya's got a lot of nerve to accuse you of copying based on such stupidness. I've read a lot of stories and your story isn't like any other I've read, though there are scenes that are similar to things I've seen in other stories. That's the thing, of all the stories I've read a lot of them have elements that are similar to those in other stories, it happens. Just ignore the moron who's stupid enough to accuse you of plagiarism based off of a couple of scenes that are somewhat similar to others stories she may have read.

Magnificent chapter! Seeing Sasuke's POV was an amazing read, even if it was heartbreaking. I feel horrible for him, he really is in such a depressing situation. I can only hope that he does get the procedure done in the end. Kakashi seems to have faith in him. Speaking of Kakashi, that scene between him and Sasuke in the hospital room was fanfiction at it's best. I went through it twice to soak everything up, and have to say that I laughed out loud at this part:


“Of course not, no one’s getting sucked off in this.” Sasuke ran his hand along the pages, separating them slowly. “Why?”

“Why? I hardly think the sexual preferences of some of the most dangerous shinobi in the world is relevant to village security.”


Pure genius! I really can't wait for the next chapter, it looks like we're already about halfway through the story, huh? It's sad when a good story ends, hopefully this one has a happy ending! If all this angst is leading to Sasuke's death I think i'll go a tiny bit insane, you know? But no matter what happens, this has made for a very entertaining read so far. Here's to an equally amazing 2nd half! ^_^

NEE! So damn good! I love this fic, and I cannot wait for more. Trust me, I'd give a better review, but I'm late for work as it is.
So, short review: Characters are all wonderful, though I hate Sasuke.(Not like it's any different from reading the manga/watching the anime, I hate him anyways. ^^) Naruto is so sweet, and deserves huge ammounts of Raman and loving for going through such angst. ^^ But it's all kept fairly IC, which I like. Your descriptions are wonderful, and I even like the time switches. It helps explain things. ^^ Keep up the kick ass work, you rock all over...And I love your fic!
~Mally~

I love your story so much. I don't know if I said this before, but your story is one of the few that renewed my love for the Naruto fandom. I'd started to lose hope in it for awhile, all the stories were either crappy or forgotten. But now there's your story and I love it. I like your writing style and I have to say I love that you double space it. That seems kind of odd but it makes it a lot easier for me to read. It was interesting getting Sasuke's perspective, I can't wait for Naruto's perspective. And I can't wait til your next update. And I can't wait til Sasuke comes to whatever conclusion Kakashi is trying to lead him to because I want to know what it is too.

Awesome chapter, loved it.

I really feel for Sasuke, you know? He does have a good reason to not want to take the procedure. But he should still hope and try it out anyways. You never know 'less you try, right?

I liked the scene with Kakashi and Sasuke, it was really well done. This whole chapter was!

GREAT job! Update soon, alright?

Gorgeous. Loved it. Great writing. Please continue.

Oh I like the story so far. It's pretty good.
I hope you'll continue this story. Keep up the good work.
until next time!
ja ne!
Fujinakaheero

I really like this, it's lovely. And I hate to do it, but I always turn into a grammar teacher when I review. It's just that I hate to see a good story interrupted by little mistakes. I'll just mention a couple easy-to-fix-if-you-feel-like-it ones, which are easy to find. In Ch. 3, you use "incarnation" when I think you mean "incarceration" and "rouge" for "rogue". The rest only I -the grammar chick - would probably notice.

Other than that, I think you write well. I especially like the way you switch between past and present. And all the little things you keep putting in that get explained later on shows me you're really thinking ahead as you write and I love that. A well-thought out plot. But I feel like this will be a tearjerker. I've got the sinking feeling that no matter what, Sasuke will die because the entire story seems to me like a memory, or a eulogy. Maybe I'm wrong, but it's a lovely story regardless.

Sasuke and Naruto's relationship is particularly nice. It's perfect the way it hovers between sweet lightness with a touch of humor and downright poignant.

Don't make me choose because you'd win every time - I love that.
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You want to do something that will make us sticky? - I like that too, made me giggle.

Good job!