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for Moonlighting

by emmel

schedule May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOL! This sounds like Kakashi...
person Anon
schedule April 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey update soon
person Somebody
schedule October 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Like the story, is the best ones I've ever read...If is not yours..then I would really would want to know who the talented author is. More stories like this should be posted here.
person Dionysos
schedule September 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
haha this fic was great!!! i love these kinds of fics! you should write more beacause u did a great job here.
person Kireiko
schedule May 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I... liked this... I did - I think. It was funny and amusing and very interesting to read, but somewhere in the middle of it all, I was all 'huh? what? wait? what?' and then I think I kinda got it at the end so I know I enjoyed the beginning and the end - it's just the middle somewhere where I got... confused? I'm not even sure what Kakashi was supposed to be doing and how Sasuke ended being blackmailed and I'm sorry if I sound like a complete idiot. I get things I really do, but it sort of jumped around so much I couldn't really tell what was happening for a little while. I understand some author's are 'if you don't get it, you don't get it' but I really enjoyed this, so could I ask for a little clarification? Anywho, the parts I did understand, I really enjoyed and the parts I didn't - well, I still enjoyed if not in a pleasantly confused sort of way...

Anywho, it's a great idea and I'd like to see more if you are so inclined to continue.

^____^

~kir
person krickets
schedule May 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
well....let me say that i thought this story was really great, and i think it has potential to be really good

but it wasnt always presented in a clear manner...their were some jumps in plot line that forced the reader to make giant leaps of logic to find out what you actually wanted us to know. It was a bit of a rough read.

i think you were going for artistic value and just came out confused. You change characters with no real warnings, often i was unable to tell who was the speaker at any particular point and i didnt understand what happened with the mission and how sasuke was blackmailed when he knew they were there?
person Chelsey
schedule May 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
God I couldn't quit laughing! You have to make another installment about Kakashi doing moonlighting. It was hilarious!

-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful
person jennjennr
schedule May 8, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I really wish I could leave you a better review, but right now I feel like the walking dead, but I just have to leave you a review to let you know how much I loved this story, it was cute sexy and funny as hell, and I hope you forgive me any crazy feverish mistakes I might have made, But I really loved this. Thanks for writting, and I hpoe to see more of your work soon.