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June 26, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh, this story was wonderful! Very cute, and very funny! Great job!
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May 20, 2010 at 12:00 AM
This was just so adorable and SWEET!!! :) My cheeks hurt from grinning too much!!!
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December 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
yeah its "Man Icing" lol now im going to have dreams about this tale
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March 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
LOL!!! icing!!! xD
Thanks for the HOT Lemonade! <3
Thanks for the HOT Lemonade! <3
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August 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Could it be icing? NO! It could not! it would be hilarious if there were like a few added parts where Tsunade bends down and tastes it. hehehe. i can imagine that.....i really can. and in my head i am laughing sooooo hard! but i Loved it. this might be one of the few stories i re-read in like a few months. XD
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June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
loved it! sweet AND hottt!!! ^_^ plus i love a possessive sasuke! and a virgin-like naruto! xD
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April 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sasuke and liquorice go together so well. It's the only candy I can imagine him eating...
The story is not so bad but both Naruto and Sasuke are totally out of character, plus there are so many clishes and unneccessary descriptions. Naruto being whiny about his past of course goes well with his ukeness but it's wierd how he suddenly changes from emoing himself out and hating Uchiha to loving him. If you didn't point out in the beginning how much Naruto despises Sasuke, it would be more believable that after few encounters Naruto would feel infatuated by Sasuke. On the other hand, a little background for Sasuke would have helped to understannd why he suddenly decides that he misses the blond and wants him. And the sudden declaration of love - how can it be? They were enemies in high school, didn't see each other for about 5 years, and then in 3 days they suddenly love each other? As I said, without pointing their high school hate period, that would have been possible, but not with the background you've given.
Well, all in all, it's not bad, you're language is fine, you just have to work more on the storyline and avoid cliches.
The story is not so bad but both Naruto and Sasuke are totally out of character, plus there are so many clishes and unneccessary descriptions. Naruto being whiny about his past of course goes well with his ukeness but it's wierd how he suddenly changes from emoing himself out and hating Uchiha to loving him. If you didn't point out in the beginning how much Naruto despises Sasuke, it would be more believable that after few encounters Naruto would feel infatuated by Sasuke. On the other hand, a little background for Sasuke would have helped to understannd why he suddenly decides that he misses the blond and wants him. And the sudden declaration of love - how can it be? They were enemies in high school, didn't see each other for about 5 years, and then in 3 days they suddenly love each other? As I said, without pointing their high school hate period, that would have been possible, but not with the background you've given.
Well, all in all, it's not bad, you're language is fine, you just have to work more on the storyline and avoid cliches.
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September 16, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yeah, its icing all right......XD nice job, very nice job indeed.... ^^
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August 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hehe that was funny, but Naruto is so thick, of coarse I'm not complaining. It was good.
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August 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmm delicious!