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November 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow..Sasuke's really confusing Naruto isn't he? Hahaha! Please update soon! The plot sounds good and I like your writing ^_^
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June 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice first chapter. After years later still pursuing Sasuke. Your Naruto is as persistant and charming as the Manga one. And Sasuke, he's still not strong enough. Did Itachi try to kill him?
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May 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'd read the next installment of this. ;)
It's a good start. I especially appreciated how easy it was to follow -- a lot of first chapters are too rushed, and kind of leave you a bit...uncertain. It was well written.
A thing that bothered me, that I know you'll fix in later chapters is the dialogue. There isn't much of it, but, I don't know. Your portrayal didn't ring completely true with me. However, you hardly had a chance to prove yourself in the intro, so I should just stop bitching.
I'll be looking for an update! ;)
It's a good start. I especially appreciated how easy it was to follow -- a lot of first chapters are too rushed, and kind of leave you a bit...uncertain. It was well written.
A thing that bothered me, that I know you'll fix in later chapters is the dialogue. There isn't much of it, but, I don't know. Your portrayal didn't ring completely true with me. However, you hardly had a chance to prove yourself in the intro, so I should just stop bitching.
I'll be looking for an update! ;)