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for Stronger is the Bond

by Xephyr

person Gldnlqr
schedule August 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this! Please contine?! I can't wait to see what's with the letters! And is Iruka-sensei getting a three-some? :blinks:
person sack attack
schedule August 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Update soon!! *goes into fangirl mode* Must....read....MORE!!!!!!!
person Inukotsu
schedule July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I LOVED IT PLEASE WRITE MORE!
person dancingkitsune
schedule July 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
i cant wait to see how this developes x3
person Bookworm51485
schedule May 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I'm going reserve judgement on the storyline until I see a bit more of it. But on the technical aspects, you've done quite well. No noticeable spelling problems, no excessive problems with grammar. That's becoming rarer and rarer. I have one bit of criticism though it's probably not true criticism, see if you can find a way to fit the story on to the screen. It went off of the edge of the screen and it's hard to read a story when you have to constantly scroll back and forth.