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August 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
(I review as I read.)
That's a really good line to open with. ____ (*snort*) Yeah, he sure talks about it a lot. 9_9 ____ Ohoho, veeeeery interesting, heheheh. ____ Boy, no waiting. I like how you gave us just a slight intro at the beginning of the story, and then swiftly and steadily went right into it. =D ____ Mmm, you spelled “forward” as “foreword”. ____ Also, you left the “h” out of “thrusts” somewhere. ____ Oh MAN! Was that it?! C'mon, it could've gone on just a little bit longer! WANT MOAR PR0NZ, PLZ!! >w<
Still, the beginning was good. =)
(Oh, and you've probably heard this a million times already, but there are formatting problems.)
That's a really good line to open with. ____ (*snort*) Yeah, he sure talks about it a lot. 9_9 ____ Ohoho, veeeeery interesting, heheheh. ____ Boy, no waiting. I like how you gave us just a slight intro at the beginning of the story, and then swiftly and steadily went right into it. =D ____ Mmm, you spelled “forward” as “foreword”. ____ Also, you left the “h” out of “thrusts” somewhere. ____ Oh MAN! Was that it?! C'mon, it could've gone on just a little bit longer! WANT MOAR PR0NZ, PLZ!! >w<
Still, the beginning was good. =)
(Oh, and you've probably heard this a million times already, but there are formatting problems.)
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June 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
gahhh sooo good! i loved this! especially "the next morning he draws in blues" *has a freaking sai/naru addiction now*
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June 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Good story ^_^ There are almost no SaiNaru fics...glad to see someone like this coupling too ^_^
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that's naughty! *q*
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June 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Sweet! Congrats! This has got to be the only story which has me liking Sai. Wish there were more of those. Anyway, thanks for the lemon. Ja.
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June 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is like a pwp a la plot, just a scosh on the side that works so well. A quality smut, eh?