rate_review Reviews

kiba's mom is named tsume... just so ya know

All right, that sucked for so many reasons. The most glaring reason I say this is because of the format in which it was written. Pure laziness is what I would guess to be the reason behind this. After all, why would we even want to do something so simple as write, [Kiba said, "Insert text."] when we can write, [Kiba: Insert text.]...

Really. Also, type out your numbers in word format. Learn proper grammar and spelling. If you're old enough to attempt to write smut, then you should be old enough to understand the basics of our language.

One more thing. This story was obviously written only for the smut. I don't have a problem with that. However, I find that you would have been better off skipping the quickly written 'excuses' for 'Akamaru's' problem and concentrating on the smut. The entire story, in my opinion, was rather silly, but I knew that it would be when I clicked on the link.

This is my nice review. I'm leaving out a lot of other things.

My advice is to learn proper grammar/get an editor.

well... i just want to say you opened this can of worms, so might as well fish with it! (in otherwords keep it going lol)