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YAY More KankuroXKiba hot sex!! I want to read more now!!

try some REAL lube. spit dries really fast. have you ever tried anal sex? if there's no lube, there's a whole lot of pain. so, um, lotion, liquid soap, cum, lubricant, or anything else to moisten the skin so it can stretch. and try to stay away from all those ands and thens. those two things would really help your writing though other then that it's pretty okay.

Very nice work, you should definatley post more

Well nice idea but writing is not that great. Most scentences start with either the characers names oder "he'. Could use improvement but that will come with more practice.