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for Revelations Of The Mind

by Gavin

person nim istar
schedule June 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
u are overly critical. that was a good chapter with a good plot.
person Wow
schedule June 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow...just wow.... that was amazing. I love this story, its by far the greatest story of NaruSaku ever written. Please update soon. I love this story, and GREAT JOB....UPDATE!
person nim istar
schedule June 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great story. please update as soon as possible
person johnny2by4
schedule June 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
great story.
person TVO
schedule June 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yikes, things kind of took a dive here.

I'm sort of getting tired of the people of Konoha hate Naruto thing. You don't ever really see the people of Konoha acting toward Naruto the way they did in this chapter in the anime or manga. Plus they are outlawed from talking about it.

You really made a mess of Sakura in this chapter as well. I would think she could've come up with a way to protect or heal herself from this instance. Or at least Tsunade would've figured some stuff out. Considering how after the Sound Arc they were able to fully heal majorly f'd up Kiba, Neji, and Chouji who had internal bleeding and injuries and pretty close to death.
person Peacemaker of the Phoenix Soul
schedule June 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Nice, chapter 5 is here and it was awesome. I didn't see the attack coming but that is what makes it good. Keep up the great work and update when you have time please.
person TVO
schedule June 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Alright, Naruto's back and Sakura is really ticked off and angry at him! But that's because she cares. I kind of like that after Naruto comes back after being away for a while that Sakura hits him, and causes to Naruto to embrace and comfort her. That's Sakura, and it was pretty sweet of Naruto.

Look forward to more Naruto/Sakura scenes like from this chapter.
person TVO
schedule June 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was a little weird. But interesting seeing that Kyuubi has his own Fox demon family.

One mistake though. You said the 5th Hokage imprisoned Kyuubi inside Naruto. The 5th Hokage is Tsunade. Yondaime is the 4th Hokage and the one that imprisoned the Nine Tails. Just a little nitpick.
person TVO
schedule June 12, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Some more really cute Naruto/Sakura scenes. And it looks like Sakura is falling for this older and more mature Naruto pretty hard. So I look forward to the more "interesting" scenes with them.

The chapter title is "calm before the storm," so I wonder what the storm is. Like a storm of love-making between Naruto and Sakura? Or a storm like a big fight or battle that will break out. Considering the site, I hope it's the former!

Anyway, thanks for doing a Naruto/Sakura fic since we don't have nearly enough of these IMHO.
person what
schedule June 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Soooo... is this where it ended?.... if not, PLEASE undate. I loved it, 2 thumbs up