rate_review Reviews

The fic is great though you tend to
drag on and not that the info isn't great it could be
I don't less boring when put into words.

*pout...pout...cry...mourn...* I wanna see what happens next! ;_; One of the best fanfics I've read(ignoring spelling and grammer errors(which is actually kinda hard for me cause I have a habit of correcting those alot, even my sister's... speaking of if you ever need a beta to read through and correct grammer and spelling... >.>;)). ;_; I hope you continue soon, I can't wait to see what happens next. <3

It's sooo good! Even though I usually don't like stories that have a tendency to move at a somewhat relaxed pace sometimes, I really like this one! An excellent style of writing! And the sasunaru is so sweet. Can't wait for it to be updated!

wow. that's all i've got to say about this story. you've got excellent plot progression and you've got wonderful control of whom the characters are and who you want them to be for yourself. this is an amazingly beautiful story and it's wonderful to read.

the only thing i would have to point out would be the simple spelling and grammatical errors that flow in the story. while distracting, they are easy to ignore, a beta reader would be perfect.

however, disregarding them, this is still an amazing story. please, keep it up and update soon. (i'll be checking for more) please, write more soon, i look forward to more from this story.

About your usage of the suffix -dono, I believe you are incorrect. According to the information I have the suffix is a variation of the old Japanese word "tono" meaning Lord, which means that it is more formal than -sama, and generally reserved for very high ranked individuals, like the Hokage. The suffix is rarely used today as it's usually considered somewhat archaic. In the manga "Lone Wolf And Cub", the authors of which carefully researched the time period (Tokugawa Era), it is frequently used. The Manga also includes a lexicon of all the unfamiliar term used in the series.

Nice, I like what you do with relationships of all kinds in this story. Not many people have such a developed concept in their writing. Keep up the good work.

yay!!! finally, some action!! XDD
Yasuo's speech was great ^_^ his description of Naruto was cute ^^
good job! cant wait for more!!

I love this story, I think it is also the first of its kind where naruto has fox spirits and such. I just really like it

OMG I LOVE this story.. please please PLEASE go on with it.. fast... *puts a katana to your trouth(?)* don't finish it and die

Nice job. You are getting a handle on the 'then' and 'than', but there are still a few missplaced.
THink:
Than= comparing
Then= Timing related
I really love this story, and I like where it is going, keep up the good work.